@ SabinaTanzola I'm really glad you like it, I actually did a huge amount of research on this one, I've been keeping myself inspired by watching tons of films starring Milo. I hoped people would get a kick out of it, I'm not sure most people realized I was directly quoting the commercial. I hope you'll stay tuned. :D
I let a smile spread across my face with this one. Definitely unique. I'm kind of speechless right now. Not sure if It's because I'm tired or just that I don't know what to say. I love how you added the California commerical in there. That made me giggle a little.
You have a good sense of direction and characterization. Very good description and detail! Just one thing, the format of your story is a little hard on the eyes. I would suggest some spacing.
For example:
*Here we would have action and description as Abbey and Milo walk through Comic-Con. SHe's seeing various things and sights.
"And then the dialogue would come," He said in a saddened tone. *
It would just make it a little easier to read :) Keep up the good work!
Yeah, I've got it basically all planned out, it's weird I feel like I know how he'd react to certain to certain situations, If you want take a look at the character list, you're on it.