Death - Comments

Like the other have said your imagery is awesome, for such a short piece it has so much power behind the words, I saw no mistakes grammatically which is always nice to see!

Wow. So I never read anything like this but that was so sweet. Like everyone who posted before me, I too think your imagery is just fantastic. I love the idea that something so short can cause my heart to beat fast and cause me to think. I think if you continue to write like this you could have a little book of short stories and I would totally buy it. :)

I like this, a lot. It's a really kind of sweet short story that really makes you think and just makes you feel good after reading it. I like the little picture of the tree you used, it goes perfectly with the story and it just looks cool ^^ I didn't spot any grammar errors and your layout was simple enough that it wasn't all 'in your face'. Over all, good job. I hope you continue to wright stuff like this :3

Again, your imagery is simply amazing. I think that's what I love best about your writing. It's true, so many people want to try and outrun Death, but we all have to accept him in the end. "No one had ever touched his cold hand or caress" I think it should be caressed, to keep it with the tense that you had at the beginning of the sentence. Never really thought how lonely Death must be. Wow, the ending sent shivers down my spine. Wow. I don't like, I love it.

Awesome. :) Your descriptive imagery was fantastic...the longing Death felt for Life and the scene where she could finally see him as a man before her eyes, plus the fact that he saved her. It was so beautifully written. I honestly enjoyed reading this.

Awesome. :) Your descriptive imagery was fantastic...the longing Death felt for Life and the scene where she could finally see him as a man before her eyes, plus the fact that he saved her. It was so beautifully written. I honestly enjoyed reading this.