Entice - Comments

I found this recently, I've read it twice!!

Amazing, I just wish there was more

Update update update!! :)

When you still check back religiously hoping for an update.

MArco?

Randomly stumbling across this. Randomly commenting to tell you I'm still here. XD
Hope you write more soon. <3

Just letting you know I'm still here and waiting for the next bit

So it's only been 4 months but I'm dying waiting for more

Ahhh this fic is literally perfect, can't wait for more chapters

I absolutely love this fic; went through it in one morning! I've been trying to make my Patrick Stump fic like this and just fell off. I cannot wait for an update!!!

Glad you're back! Cannot wait for more!

I'm not on mibba that often now but when I got email you updated this I went on right away.

Yay another update!!!!
So glad you're back!

Aw, you're welcome! I'm just really happy you're continuing with it and still keep the story in mind; it's rather easy to abandon a story but it makes you awesome that you haven't. :)
And okay, I'll make sure to note anything I see then. Just wanted to make sure I wasn't being annoying. lol.
One thing I meant to note with the latest update as well, I was a bit confused with Faye's outfit. Because at one point you put "sheer stuff of her black dress," but then later you put how she was wearing more of a one-piece/romper type of outfit. But yeah, I just realized I never pointed that out with my comment, which may need to be clarified. XD
I'll stop rambling now. Hope you're able to update again soon. :)

I used to love this story and I'm so happy you re started again!! Keep going!

@ breepocket
Lol girl I understand, I've been into reading this kinky stuff for years it's just took me so long to gain the courage to write it!!! And you're too kind, I don't know if I'd use the word "phenomenal" to describe my writing more like "somewhat above average"

Also, I hope to be faster at updating!! (I mean it's not that hard to be faster than a year between chapters ha) I have a general idea for the next chapters moving forward it's just a matter of getting them on paper. But I so ready and excited to jump back into it so cheers to that!!

@ bob morley
I about died reading this. I fangirl when you post, so trust me the feeling is completely mutual. Also helps that I'm totally into kinky stuff, and All Time Low, so you know, this is like the best combination ever. The fact that your writing is also phenomenal is a great bonus!

Also, I totally wouldn't be upset if you posted more relatively soon. In case you're interested in how I feel =]

@ breepocket
Thanks girl! Tbh you've been like my most dedicated reader for this story and every time I see you've commented I fangirl a bit. Thanks so much for your encouraging presence and words!!! :)

@ awalkingtravestyy
Ahhhh I'm glad it's your favorite! I have to admit my writing skills are ridiculously rusty so I'm trying to get back to where I used to be skill wise. But thanks so much that is a huge compliment!!!!

@ ChaseBarakat
Thanks so much love!!! I'm so sorry I disappeared for so long, hopefully I won't randomly pop away from you guys again. I'm gonna try and stick this one out!!

@ Nanook
You have also been a very dedicate reader of mine and are super amazing so thank you so much for continuing with me girl!! Haha and yeah lololololol I definitely reread this chapter about 18 different times before I posted it so all those little errors are ones I glossed over because my brain likes to autocorrect as I read. You are more than welcome to find these little flaws for me, they help tremendously and also help me become better at not missing as many mistakes!! Thanks for sticking with me ❤️

OMG another update already?! It must actually be snowing (heh, slight climate change joke... although sad reality).
Aww... I think Alex is starting to fall for her. :') I thought this before but this chapter made it a bit more obvious. With like the heart skipping a beat part and just how much kinder he's being with her. In the beginning, he wouldn't let how she's acting now fly but now he's letting her get away with some of it, lol. So I think this is definitely showing emotional development. Or maybe it's just me that thinks this. XD
As a story starts to be updated again I tend to start going through mistakes I spot. Feel free to let me know if this is annoying, lol, but just a few things I spotted:
A little growl crawls out of his throat without his meaning to and he pulls her flush against his body so her hips cant into his unintentionally.
"cant"? I'm not sure what word you wanted here... maybe "bend" instead? I think I could get what you were referring to, but looking up the definition, the word is off.
“Let’s let loose guys, and have fun!” Lulu hootss as she begins to poor shots for everyone.
Extra s on the end of "hoots" lol.
Her presses a light kiss to her cheek, squeezing the back of her neck gently to remind her that he wasn’t mad.
"He" at the beginning of this one. But looking at this line in general, I found it sweet and further proof that he's showing a caring side. Aw.
But yeah, these are just a few things I saw. Again, let me know if you find this helpful or if you would rather I not do this. Some authors care while others just look to post stories as is and don't pay too much mind to small errors such as these. Which I can understand if you just want to keep flowing with the story.
But overall, great update! Kudos to such a long update, I need you to send me some of your writing vibes... I'm currently trying to write a novella myself but I'm seriously struggling. :( But anyway, I also liked how you ended this chapter similarly to your last, it definitely helps tie things together. :)
Hmm... I think that's all I have to say. lol. I'm glad to see there are still so many readers for your story, hope it encourages you to keep updating. :) This story definitely deserves the comments.

my heart literally skipped a beat when this popped up in my notifications been missing this story in from my life

Omg this is probably my favorite chapter so far! This story is so far beyond good. Can't wait for the next update!