Forever - Comments

Beautiful story. I love it.

Oh my god Twitch is such a creep sometimes. The way he picked up that chick at the bar weirded me out a little. Just the way he speaks to women. Damn. Reminds me of one of those sleazy, pervy men I see all the time in the city. You know what I mean? Such a stark difference to the way he treats Marilyn.

You know, you're doing a really fantastic job bringing him to life as a character. Like, I kid you not, I actually sort of feel like he is real. Like he makes me feel legitimate emotions. And it really truly is next to impossible to do that to me. So congratulations on that.

I really like where this story is going. We get to see a lot more backstory, and I'm really interested to find out more about Mercury. Keep it up!

@ GemVicious
I used to ADORE Charmed.
And they're not all that different...
The whole dream-shabang is just so dirty, though.
I love it.
It's like...He's real and he's already visited YOU in the night.
I'm glad you're enjoying the story! Your opinion is the most important one to me! <3
xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox

this is fucking fantastic please update again soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Okay first off... the dream thing is fuckin' cool seeing as it happened to me LOL. BUT, here's something WEIRD for you.. I had a dream that some man was trying to .....um well, it was a 'pleasant' dream, and as he was doing 'things' to me, he turned into a demon with red and black stripes all over his skin. HOW WEIRD IS THAT. I'M PSYCHIC I SWEAR LOL. The man in my dream was Cole (Balthezar) from Charmed, if you've ever seen that show... not quite Twitch, but that's still really weird that I dreamed that lol. I love this so much, I can't even tell you how much!!!! oooxoxoxooxoxoox

@ GemVicious
You better be! xoxoxoxo

You are building up so much suspense here omg :O .......i'll be waiting my love ;) xxoxoxoxoxox

Comment Swap:
First off: the layout is a bit cluttered which was a bit distracting.

I don't see many grammatical errors, but I'd touch up on a few. Proofread some more and you'll eliminate them. The story itself was nice. It's creative and your descriptions of the relationship between Twitch and the main character are really good. It's a little confusing, but once I realized what was going on, I really liked it. Good job. :)

@ fall0ut
I should hope so! Thanks, cutie. (;

@ GemVicious
You know it! Thanks. It shouldn't be long for my next chapter! xoxoxoxoxox

Beautiful and tragic. Plucked my heartstrings like a damn guitar! I never expected anything less. Keep up the good work; I can't wait to read the next chapter!

Thanks for reading<3

Holy shit babe! THIS IS THE MOST BEAUTIFUL THING I'VE EVER READ!!!!! omggggg i can't wait to see what happens next :D !!!!!!!!!!!! xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxxo

I saw that picture on tumblr the other day.
And I was kind of just casually scrolling through my dash,
Then BOOM!
That picture showed up.
And I like stared at it for maybe threeish minutes straight.
There's something about it.

So yeah.
Sadistic Twitch.
Frightening, yet totally lust-worthy (;
Exceeded expectations.

@ NerdGlasses
That's the plan! (: thank you!

I find this story utterly confusing. But in a good way! Keep on confusing me :)

@ GemVicious
Ahahaha you are the best ever.
I love you so much xoxoxoxoxox

I am speechless omg omg. I love this soooooooo much ahhhhhh xoxoxoxoxoxo

Oh my god!!!!! What a sick bastard.... A beautiful, charming, sick bastard hahahahahaha xoxoxoxoxoxo

MARRY ME TWITCH!!!!!!!!!!! protect meeeeeee!!!!!!!!!! hahahaha. I love love love this so much, you need to keep updating ASAP. I love how you put that she had a panic attack, it's so easy to relate with. I'm soooo curious to know what happened to Twitch now, and what exactly he is. I love Twitch, he's so lovable, but clearly so broken, it's almost perfect. <333333333333333333 oxoxoxoxxooxox