Where the Wind Takes Us - Comments

Prologue:
I absolutely love how this is flows. The depth into the character is so well put together, I love the insight into her mind.

And the line "...we weren’t sitting on a rooftop but rather you were sitting on my heart and there was a weight pressed down onto me." is absolutely fantastic.

And the last sentence. It's so heartbreaking, and I'm so excited to see where this goes.

Chapter 1:
Your descriptions are so fleshed out that you just put us in Natalie's shoes. I love how it starts and how it ends. This is just so relatable, it's great.

I am less interested though, but not because you're writing isn't up to par, just that this isn't the type of story I really enjoy reading.

You're a fantastic writer. I'm definitely recommending this.

Woah. When Josh said that Mick started the fire - shit just go really real woah.
And then I SHIP MYSELF AND JOSH'S TWIN BROTHERS threesooomeeeee ship Josh and Natalie so hard right now that I stayed up until 2am reading this whole thing. I just fell in love with this story so much now I hope you can continue it.

Awesome update! Josh is an awesome character. I'm curious to see what happens next and at this party.

This is amazing! Can't wait for an update!

OH MY GOD
THE BANANA THING I'M CRYING
ALEX YOU'RE KILLING ME
ALSO HAPPY BELATED-A'F BIRTHDAY!!!!!!!!!
i'm so happy that she and Mick are starting to fix things even though Mick's a fuckin scumbag (attractive one at that) and Georgia and Colton omfg i'm cryING
this trip should be interesting ;))))

That was an AMAZING read! Great job, I loved everything about it, and the part when her parents give her the charm bracelet, I think my eyes dewed up at the pants and sister charm. Ahh, now I definitely have to go back and read Rooftop Musings. I like her relationship with James and Josh (James is awesome, therefor, I will also read the sequel) I really can't put together a coherent thought and explain it in words, you definitely have talent, and were more than capable of holding onto my attention throughout. I really like how you started chapter one, it was simple, Nat just trying to figure it out for herself, what is love? And by the end, it just fucking sucks. I felt so bad for her! After getting shot down, she had to play it cool and still hang around Mick. I love all your characters, they're amazing and you've kept them evenly used (A lot of stories have main characters that disappear for a while, then they just pop back up and you have to remember who they were) I like that you didn't go for that, you kept them all close together and it's amazing. I really like how you write emotion, it's not too crazy and overdone, it's just right and realistic. A big, fat 10, A+. Great job! Update soon! You've definitely got a good plot here.

You do a really good job of grabbing the reader's attention even from such a short prologue. I loved it because of the rawness and the emotion that you are able to portray without needing to use so many words. One of my favorite lines was: we weren’t sitting on a rooftop but rather you were sitting on my heart and there was a weight pressed down onto me.- it's just so heart wrenching and it really hits you.

I loved the transition from the prologue into the rest of the story.They way Natalie is trying to write in her diary but she can manage is Love sucks. It's just so relatable.

First I would like to report that I found no grammar problems or mistakes although I am not a grammar expert, but unless you made some very less than obvious mistakes I think you are fine.

While I don't usually like straight romance drama like stories I can appreciate this one, I thought it was nice. I felt for the girl, just as she was about to tell the guy how she felt she got discouraged and I'm almost willing to bed that he felt the same way about her and now his heart is broken just like hers because he also thinks she doesn't feel the same way.

I think I can see where this story is going but I could be wrong, but I can almost tell that this is a story that would emotionally frustrate me which isn't a bad thing for a story to be able to trigger people's emotions and have people be able to feel what the characters are feeling.

Good job, keep it up.

Wow, the prologue is pretty intense. There's so much emotion poured out and it felt like it came out of a well-written diary - which is a good thing. I felt so sorry for the protagonist, and could relate quite easily to her. I thought this couldn't be topped, but the first chapter is even better.

The grammar and spelling is pretty much spot-on from what I've read, and everything flows as it should in my opinion. There's only two mistakes I did pick up on in the first chapter: But I decide to be stealth anyways. This should be "stealthy". You also didn't capitalize the T in Tumblr. I also feel like Natalie's name could have been mentioned fairly early on in the chapter.

It's easy to relate to, emotional, and funny; definitely a winning combination for a story.

I really liked the prologue. I think your descriptions flowed very well and you made them so relatable that I understood exactly what the character was feeling in that moment. It was definitely a good way to hook your readers!

In the first chapter I like how you once again made your character seem really relatable. She's got family issues, she sits on her laptop on a social site, and she can't be bothered getting off her butt And I have to admit that it's refreshing, I haven't stumbled across a character like this for a while, and I think that's something special

The second chapter was good in terms of defining Natalie's other important relationships in her life and getting a glimpse of her typical day without it being boring. I think you've got a good set up for an interesting story, so well done

This chapter was hilarious! I kind of missed all the good joking around. Glad to see that Nat has set things straight. Excited for the next updateeeee. xx

I am so excited for the chapters involving the school trip. And Nat's birthday is going to be awesome - I can feel it. I loved seeing a new side to Georgia, with her getting all embarrassed. Happy belated birthday!

Eeeep this was a fairly light-hearted chapter, and I loved it. Definitely was in need of some Mick love. You just can't help but love Mick, honestly. Excited to see where it goes from here. xx

Always team Mick forever and ever.

This chapter just makes me even more excited about the rest of the story! So many little pieces of what the future holds. Excited for what comes next! xx

Short chapters are such teases! I still can't get enough of this story. And talking about teases, how dare you write that author's note. I just want all the chapters now. But I shall wait patiently and continue to comment about how much I adore this story.

I love this story! I've only read the first 4 chapters, but I'm definitely going to read the rest shortly. You're a great writer, it's not boring to read or anything and actually captures my interest. I think your characters are good, too, not bland, know what I mean? Subscribed (:

omfg i'm so excited for what's coming up next
i feel like this chapter may just be a transition into all that you've got planned i'M SO READY
UM, HER 18TH BIRTHDAY?! SHE'S GONNA GO CRAZY
CONDOMS AND BEACH KISSES
WHAT THE FUCK ARE YOU TRYING TO SAY HErE
ALSO THE MICK LOVE THING
WHAT ARE YOU INSINUATING

i love Natalie and James tbh and would not mind one bit if they got together (so agreeing with orange county. here)
alSO HEY LIL SKITTLEZ CHAINZ YOU UPDATED!!!!!! U R PERFECT

I don't care what you say, I have to believe that James does like Natalie. Sometimes I get sick of Josh and Mick love triangle drama, and I like to believe that James and Natalie are a possibility.

I honestly have so much love for this story, and this chapter was just another great addition. They all fit together so well and are so damn hilarious. I wish I could write something so genuinely funny and engaging as this.

I didn't think Mick was going to be a freaking arsonist as well as a part-time asshole. I hope there's more to the story, but I don't want to call Josh a liar. I just can't wait for the next chapter already.