Immortal Kiss - Comments

This was... sexy. The whole vibe of the story just pulls me in. I like Ophelia's effortless seduction and the way she interacts with Mercy and Maria. I'm looking forward to see how she draws in Maria though and where everything goes from this point. D: Update soon! I'm going to subscribe so I know when you do~ :]

Well, this is definitely different than what I usually read. But that's a good thing, helping me branch out some on my reading tastes. :)

Anyways, this was relatively interesting. I found it hard to keep reading, though, because the chapters are so short. To me, it sort of dragged out this moment a little too long. However, your writing style is very nice, very clean, with little to no grammar mistakes.

I haven't read many stories like this, simply because they don't fit into my personal taste, but this one was enjoyable. I like how strong you made Ophelia. You didn't take away her will to be free and her own person even though she's enslaved to Christian. I didn't get far enough to see if we got anymore on their relationship yet, but I think that'll be really interesting, as will their history together.

Overall, this was interesting, and nicely written. :)

I'm already really enjoying it. Even though it's just getting started and the chapters are on the short side, it's all enough to reel you in and wonder what's going on next - like how exactly it's going to go at her apartment. I do love that name though, Ophelia. It very pretty. I'm not usually into these kind of stories either, but I'm definitely subscribing and going to wait for more. Great job!

I really like this. It's been so long since I've read a vampire story since I've been reading all things Avenged Sevenfold lately so this is quite refreshing. These are the types of books I like to read, anything supernatural. This is very well written. I love how Ophelia is all seductive and sexy and left Damian all dumbfounded lol. I wonder how it will go seducing Maria, it seems that it will be a little harder to convince her. This is really great and I just might have to come back and see what happens. Fuck it, I'm subscribing and will check back on this. Update soon please. I like how you can describe so much in so little words, I could never do that so kudos to you.

I'm loving this, it's extremely well written and your description is brilliant... I don't normally read stuff like this if I'm honest but this is definitely a story that would hold my interest... Good job :)

Ophelia
I love that name…

I knew he was my master and I had to do everything he ordered me to but there were things I wished I could deny.
Either this is kinky or a vampie story… Sorry I am a smartass…

The bond I had with my maker was burning my throat like bitter whiskey.
I really like that description.

This seems promising and I am very curious as to where this is going.

Ooooh I like master fics, and this surely didn't disappoint. I loved it!

I’m just going to warn you first off that I suck at giving story comments because I just started today. So forgive me if it’s of crappy quality.

Anyway I’m not usually into vampire and/or master type stories and since the chapters are so short there isn’t a whole lot to go on for the plot just yet. However, I actually like the short chapters because I have a very horrible attention span and I like these little blips added to the story while it slowly builds. I think those are the best kinds of stories to read and write because the growth is really interesting to see. And it gives me a lot of chances to take breaks. Which I need since I have a pesky toddler in my house. :P

But keep up the good work. You spelling and grammar is flawless and so far the story seems very sensual and I’d like to see what’s up with the master and a resolution for that. :)

This lady knows when she wants something doesn't she?
When is her Master coming into play?
This is a rather interesting look on the supernatural :)

I like the name and the idea behind it, I just really wish the chapters were longer, when I saw it was chaptered I thought it would take me longer but the chapters were so short I breezed through it. I loved it though none the less.

I can't wait to see what happens next. I want to read more! Update!!! Lol

I love her name, it's so unique. The plot and the characters in it are interesting so it keeps my attention. I'm curious about her master and want to know more about him, like what does he do exactly, but right now reading about Ophelia is good enough for me. She's got a sassy and cocky kind of attitude so she makes things fun. I'm curious as to why she has to seduce them, but it makes things interesting.

I think this story has a lot of potential and I hope you keep it up! Don't let silent readers get you down!

First off, I love the short chapters! I'm tired and long chapters make me discouraged. I feel like you actually put enough detail and everything in to make it worthwhile, which is a wonderful feat. I'm usually not into vampire or master stories, so I was planning only to read the first chapter, but this actually pulled me in! Good job. I love Ophelia's personality. She's fun to read, to see what she will do!

Hey there !

I am liking this story so far. I am thinking that you have something planned out for this already. I find it extremely amusing how you could just change point-of-views like this. Your story, Death Wish was about a vampire hunter, and now you are switching up everything and doing a vampire POV.

The name Ophelia just reminds me of Hamlet. Can't wait to find out what happens next!
I also love the fact that you made the chapters short as it was easier to read that way. . .

Please do keep on writing!

~ Verona :)

I seriously love this, I love how short the chapters were so it doesn't take an hour to read each chapter! I love the name Ophelia I never heard of it before and its just so unique. I could read this story over and over again!

I love the names Mercy and Ophelia. Ophelia's a likable character and I like the little humor here and there. Wondering what's going to happen between Maria and Ophelia...

This is just purely amazing. I was pulled in from the moment I saw the summary. I love how you make the chapters short, it really keeps me wanting more. I'm anxious to see where this goes and if Ophelia will be able to seduce Maria. Excited to see more hun

I really like this so far, Ophelia is a really great character and I like the way she tries to get the twins to warm to her instead of just taking them straight away

I really like this. Can't wait for thee next update!

~T. Strange ~

Okay so, at first, I thought it was very fast moving, it jumped straight in without much of an introduction to the characters. But keep going, and as short as the chapters are, they feature what they need to feature. It is clear that your main character does not care for humans, and it is clear that your human characters are the clueless catch she needs them to be. I would love to see some longer chapters.

Rae