December 23rd, 2013 at 02:59am
Merry Christmas!
That poem on the summary is lovely, as is the layout. I'll get onto reading now. This was defintiely a very interesting and unique opening. I loved that it started off with the shock of the narrator being slapped. One thing I noticed was the third paragraph's opening sentence. It should read, "I know about those night(s)"
Again, the second chapter is just so strangely unique, but I honestly like it - it's just like an outpour of thought. I do feel like the ellipsis in the opening sentence disrupts the flow a bit, however, that could just be me.
Overall, I'm just blown away by this update and I'm excited to read more already. I've already recommended it on this site but I might just have to spread the word somehow about this especially to a friend of mine on the site who would fall in love with this. Keep up the good work sweetie! Also thanks for dedicating (I feel so special and honoured because you're literally my favourite writer/person on here) and thank you for the mention! :)