The Poison in Your Blood - Comments

Wow, it was long. It didnt seem long when I was reading it but when I was scrolling back through it I was like wow. Anyways, I liked it. I liked her sister and learning about her family. I have a feeling something bad is going to happen to old Fred. Yikes. Lol. More soon!

Yes! You did what I wanted you to in my last comment. You made it seem like there was more to the relationship than just sex and vampires. They were connecting and it was nice.

The Jonathan thing kind of was just Ok for me. I'm a little concerned that Austin is going to eat him. Lol. But yeah. It was good, but I just don't really think it fit with the rest of the chapter. But hopefully he leaves her alone now.

This was really good. More soon?

This was probably my favorite chapter in this story. It felt really authentic and real. It had cute, sweet moments, and sad moments, and angry moments. Jonathan is such a jerk, like why is he still calling her? How annoying. But, really good chapter. I'm so sorry it took me so long to read it, for whatever reason I thought I read it.

This is probably the best you've ever done writing in first person. Just putting that out there because I know you sometimes struggle with it.

This was a good chapter. I wanted him to tell her more about himself! She deserves to know! All the secret keeping is lame as hell.

But I liked it when they were just talking and being somewhat normal. I feel like there needs to be more to their relationship though. More than just sex and talking about him being a vampire. Like that's all their relationship is based on. If that makes sense at all.

Great chapter. More soon?

Very sexy. Lol. This was a good chapter. I feel like they're at a cross roads, like they need to figure out what they're doing and if they're going to be together. And yay for drama! Drama is fun. More soon!

So I'm sitting in my car by myself reading this and the line "you're in the danger zone" totally made me crack up.

I laughed through this whole thing at Lana. Poor thing.i don't blame her! How freaky. I would not be around someone who so causally talks about killing people on a regular basis. But good for her. Lol

Good chapter. More soon?

This was kind of a crazy chapter. I mean obviously she's gone crazy or he's hypnotized her or something. Lol. It was a good chapter, it made me laugh in some parts. Good job. More soon!

Poor piggy. That is a horrible name! Lol. But who am I to talk. I'm a horrible friend for taking so long to read this update. And I know thati kept you from updating again. But I do thank you for not updating again. Who knows how long it would have taken me to read two updates at once. Lol.

But I liked it. The dream sequence was scary, and you can definitely see how conflicted she is. I kind of wished that she had told Madison about him beinga vampire. That conversation would have been hilarious.

Good job, honey bunny. I promise I will try to get to your next update sooner.

Omg, the conversation with Madison cracked me up. Lana just kept digging herself deeper and deeper. Lol. And yay, she finally got her cat! Although Piggy is a pretty unfortunate name. Lol. And Jonathan was a nice addition too. He could prove to be interesting. More soon!

It was definitely interesting to read. The part with the Starbucks chick was creepy. I was confused, like did he kill her or not? Does he just like, go out and kill random people? Oh my god. Lol.

But I'm glad that is out in the open now. Now we can really get into things.

Nice job. More soon?

Not gonna lie, this was a little interesting for me since I don't typically read stories like this, but I liked it. Lana's fear was very genuine, along with Austin's anguish over the whole situation. I'm excited to see what will happen now that she knows about him. More soon!

Lol. I agree with Madison. The vampire thing needs to come out soon. When he snuck off to "eat" omg I was freaking inside. So creepy. Lol. And the end was kinda sad. She shouldn't have called Jonathan. That can only lead to now heartbreak. And she already has one weird guy with drama. A girl can only handle so many of those.

I really loved this one. You paint such a flattering picture of me, you make me sound so much cooler than I really am. Oh who am I kidding? I really am that cool. Lol. But seriously, this one was really fun and also creepy with Austin. He'd better tell her he's a vampire soon, being that its kind of the elephant in the room right now. Lol. More soon!

This is the best of all so far. It's definitely progressing well. The past when she was talking herself into getting a cat was funny.

Vampires must be infertile or something? That's why she can't get pregnant? Don't judge me, I honestly know nothing about vampires. Lol

I liked this one the best out of all three chapters. It gave more insight into Lana, even though she admittedly is pretty basic. You're doing good with this story so far, I'm excited for the next chapter.

So I'm just going to leave one comment, which I know you're going to be irritated with but I'm still having issues with losing the comment page so I don't want to push my luck.

OK, so, yes this is very different for you. Obviously the fantasy thing and it being in first person. But you're doing good with it. The second chapter was better. More in depth over all. But you'll have that with intro chapters.

The way he's moving fast all over the place is freaky as hell. Lol.

But I don't mind this at all. Very good, babe.

Hmm, it was kind of creepy, in a sexy good way of course. Also, I like the idea of keeping it just in Lana's pov. Idk why. I'm liking this story. Keep it up!

Loved it. Super fun. Quite a departure from your usual stuff. I'm excited to see what happens when she finds out he's a vampire. Lol. Update soon.