poor gerard
July 4th, 2008 at 03:33am
haha thnx i guess.. why don't you just subscribe? :)
- RelientK:
- i strangly want more... lol message me when more is up.
hmm.. i actually think i will carry on with the flashback :)
- my loveless life:
- can you please carry on with the flash back *gives you puss in boots eyes*
great update by the way
i'm glad you liked it, and yeah, i know i suck at those kinda things, but it's hard expressing things when your not that good at english, but i'll try though! thanks fom the tips :) xx
- xXBrokenxRosesXx:
- Ok I'm gonna give you some con-crit because I really like the story ok?
You have a very good idea and your following a very good plotline, the only thing is that it feels as though its slightly rushed, take some more time to really develop the scenes, add more description & dialogue, emotion, things like that as it really helps the reader visualise the sitution. If you just take a bit longer to improve the small things, you could better this yet.
You have a really good story and I enjoy reading it, I don't wanna make you feel like I'm putting you down :S
Another update?