Beyond - Comments

Oh, my. This is getting intense. I love the update.

Poor Sara. She doesn't even know how dangerous John is.

I'm super confused with this chapter, whors PoV is the story being told from? And why is there no indication at the top of the page whose's POV it is? Please add one.

This story and your writing style are both awesome and interesting, both totally unique :]

I really loved this update! Although I would appreciate if somewhere in the chapter it stated who's POV the story was being told from. Other than that I am loving this and please update soon!

I like that you decided to write it in this tone using first person narration, we get a different perspective and I think that adds a lot of character, so to speak. We are in the victim's head and we see, in short words how psychological messed up Eden is, which is understandable and realistic to the core. It's sad that her life may never get better from here on out. It's sad to finally see and feel how she see's and feels because she is constantly in fear and that's no way to live.

I would love you forever if you wrote a chapter(s) in John's perspective, I would LOVE to read what he things and get inside his head vs the third person narrative, however there were little pieces in the other story where John added his two cents, that was a nice touch.

Looking forward to the next update! :)

Please do chapters in John's POV. That would be super interesting and awesome! Good update, btw

This is amazing. I'm so glad that there is a sequel.

I am SO happy you decided to do a sequel for this story! I love the layout and the summary! Chapter 1 was good and I'm looking forward to the update!