Forbidden - Comments

The idea is wonderful and unique. I can't wait to read more (:

I'm glad that she gave Nathan somewhat of an explanation - hopefully that'll keep him at bay for a while. I spotted a small mistake, which was that this sentence doesn't make sense: ...as if he didn’t had no idea. The meeting between Alec and Brin was nice, just in the sense that they accepted each other and didn't really care that they weren't perfect. It should be fun to watch their relationship grow. Great chapter, update soon!

I like the pace of this story (: nothing seems.really forced

I can sense the chemistry between Alec and Brinley. I have no problem with Nathan, he sounds nice from the way you described him. But he's too perfect, the kind of perfect you suddenly get tired of. Even though I wasn't Brinley, I was touched when he said that it was fine for them to wait.

Aww, I'm getting hooked in this story already!

I don't feel like you're moving too fast or introducing too much terminology - I'm following the story well so far Brinley has such an interesting relationship with Nathan, and I can't wait to see how that all pans out. And I bet she'll see Alec again, so that should be interesting too
Only spotted a tiny error - “It’s a patrolman, Come on!” - the 'c' doesn't need to be capitalised. Other than that, you're awesome at making no mistakes while writing in the middle of the night
Looking forward to more!

I'm obsessed with this story! Update soon!! :D

Ooo Alec sounds interesting, I'm excited to see if she goes back and sees him again!

This is so amazingly original and good!

I like this chapter as well. I'm really excited to see where this goes. All these questions I have.

Will she run away? Will she meet a natural and fall in love with him/her? Will she stay with Nathan and accept her fate as a Cube?

Update soon. I'm excited for it :)

The prologue sounds very interesting. I got confused a little with all the terms you've given here.

I still choose to continue reading this story and I am excited to see what's next!

This is a really interesting premise, and I'm looking forward to see how it goes.

This sounds really interesting! I'm keen to see where you take this story!

I like this. I feel as though the storyline will pan out kind of like The Host. Keep writing :P