Classics in Summertime - Comments

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Hey!
Okay, I'm going to say this, then carry on... OMG I LOVE THISSSSS!!!! Dylan was awesome in Maze Runner, can't wait to see Scorch Trails
Alright, so I love how you wrote this. A lot of fanfics, from other musicians, movie stars and games, they usually take place with the girl already living in California, so I really like that you took it elsewhere and had Ev be a country girl ;) It was funny at times to read how awkward and adorable Dylan is towards her, I'm excited to read what happens next. Love the summary, it gives you an insight that he just doesn't belong there, but throughout the story, he works his way into that way of life. Keep writing! Can't wait to read the net update!

Summary

I loved the summary. I love the picture it painted of this boy. I thought the descriptions were interesting and clever; not just your average, 'he looked like this with this colored eyes,' but a description that really allowed me to picture what kind of person he was and to wonder about where he was coming from and where he really wanted to be.

Chapter 1

The entire first chapter, for me, read like a published book. It had this YA/Nicholas Sparks feel that I really liked and it made me want to read more. I thought the interactions between Everly and Dylan felt natural and real, and I think it just made sense within the context and setting of the story. (Sometimes when I read fanfiction like this - where the celebrity is the same person they are in real life a.k.a. 'famous' the interactions can seem a little forced or impossible, but that definitely wasn't the case here.)

Even though it's just one chapter in, I really do like Everly - as a character but moreso as a narrator. There's a down-to-earth feel to her that I think is going to work really well. And I feel like she's going to be a truthful narrator as well as an emotional one. There's just something really clean about her so far (not 'pure' or anything like that), but she just feels like she's going to be really grounded and straightforward. I like it.

Chapter 2

Getting to meet Wyatt was interesting. For now, he seems like a typical country boy who looks down own those 'soft' city boys. XD I'm interested in learning more about his relationship with Everly. Is it a 'for real' thing or is it just a relationship that's sometimes convenient. The fact that they live in a town that's so small, it seems like when they are together, it might be because they're what's available to each other. I wonder if his jealousy is real or if it's more of a territorial thing.

Chapter 3

Parts of this chapter reminded me of John Green's An Abundance of Katherines, which I can't remember all that clearly. But it did include a jealous ex, a new boyfriend, and 'the country." XD Everly and Wyatt's past doesn't really surprise me. It fits with how they are around each other and his initial reaction to Dylan. I do wonder what 'other stuff' went on between the two of them, and I definitely feel for Everly, being stuck with an ex your parents love in a very small town. I can only imagine how inescapable that must make her feel.

Chapter 4

This chapter really solidified my fears for Everly. That she keeps getting stuck in relationship she may not really want because of her town and her family's relationship with Wyatt. Also, when I think about her family's loyalty to him and the fact that she holds a bit of a 'position' in the town (as County Queen), I can't help but feel like maybe they're the town's "It" couple, which adds a whole ton pressure too.

The fact that she's sneaking around with Dylan - even though she doesn't have any real reason too (she's not underage and she doesn't have a boyfriend) - makes me think that she really does feel trapped or like she'd be letting people down if she thought of a life with someone other than Wyatt. I hope she finds some strength because I know drama's up ahead.

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Subscribed and rec'd! I'm really enjoying this story, so far (and I'll continue reading later tonight). I like the characters, I like their interactions, I like the writing. It's all good! I also think the chapter lengths are perfect and it allows me to stay interested and ready to read more.

Hey there!

To start off, I'm very picky about fan-fic. Just because, I don't know, it rarely seems real to me. I like a realness instead of just a story that is just a fantasy rather than something that seems realistic. So, I do love that your story is that. I've read a lot of fan-fic stories that don't separate the famous person or whomever is being written about from their reality. It's always the OC being inserted into their lifestyle it seems so what really draws me to this story is that it's the opposite. You're learning about Dylan O'Brien through the point of view of your character.

So I think I'll finish reading this because of that! And because lets face it, Dylan O'Brien is the perfect mix of boyish and a hot manly man so that's just an added bonus!

Happy writing!

Hey there!

To start off, I'm very picky about fan-fic. Just because, I don't know, it rarely seems real to me. I like a realness instead of just a story that is just a fantasy rather than something that seems realistic. So, I do love that your story is that. I've read a lot of fan-fic stories that don't separate the famous person or whomever is being written about from their reality. It's always the OC being inserted into their lifestyle it seems so what really draws me to this story is that it's the opposite. You're learning about Dylan O'Brien through the point of view of your character.

So I think I'll finish reading this because of that! And because lets face it, Dylan O'Brien is the perfect mix of boyish and a hot manly man so that's just an added bonus!

Happy writing!

I really like the fact that I know nothing about Dylan O'Brien except for whatever I read about him in your stories. It feels like I'm following your character through your stories and it's great Also, I adore the name Everly, it made me so happy that you used it.

I really love how you write your chapters. You also flow through events so nicely and never get stuck on anything for too long. Your character relationships are great as well, you build them up and it feels really natural when the people end up getting together.

Some things I found:

Chapter 1:
I loved my mother with all my heart, but she had a thing for younger men, mostly involving looking at them.
I loved this line.

Chapter 2:
He really was great around the farm, even as much of an ass as he was.
The second half of the sentence felt awkward to me.

I ALREADY CAN'T HANDLE HOW CUTE DYLAN IS THOUGH OMG.

Chapter 6:
“I can see you’re busy now, but I was wondering if you were free later? I thought maybe we could go for a walk later. I found this place in the woods behind my house that I really wanted to show you.”
Having later twice in this sentence seemed kinda weird.

Chapter 10:
There was Brad Paisley playing out of some old speakers in the corner, and everyone was either dancing, chatting on the sidelines or drinking punch on the other side of the room.
Forgot "a" before "Brad Paisley".

Chapter 12:
I looked sheepishly down at the table while I tucked my hair behind my ears. “It was good thank.”
"Thank" should be "thanks".

Chapter 19:
He threw our bags in the drunk and opened the car door for me before we slipped into the back of the taxi.
"Drunk" should be "trunk".

I can't wait to see what happens in Cali

This is one of my favourite stories on this site. I gush with every chapter ahaha!

What a freaking beautiful update! I love it!!

So good!!! I'm loving every word of this story. It's amazing. :)

She got on the plane so its real! So glad
Been missing this story

Ohhhhh, I've missed this story! I'm so happy it's back! I'm excited to see how their trip goes!

omg rodeo i'm dying
but yeah Dylan definitely shouldn't have lied to her parents, because this is something she should tell them buT SO EXCITING, GOING TO CALIFORNIAAA!

DYLAN
BOUGHT
THE
SEAT
NEXT
TO
HIM
JUST
IN
CASE
OH MY GOD
OH MY GOD
I HATE IT WHEN THAT SHIT HAPPENS BC IT'S SO CHEESY
LIKE BEN WYATT WHEN HE DIDN'T WRITE LESLIE'S LOSING SPEECH FOR THE CAMPAIGN (parksandrec4life)
OH MY GOODNESS NO DON'T MAKE ME CRY

I died of laughter because of the rodeo thing. Oh man. That is so classic. I loved this chapter!!

I died of laughter because of the rodeo thing. Oh man. That is so classic. I loved this chapter!!

I love this! Can't wait for more!!!!

Lol rodeo camp!!
love Dylan

I was so excited when I saw the subscription email for this! I can't wait to see what they do while in California!

I loved the update! I hope their trip is amazing! Post more soon!

I hadn't been able to read your update until today and it have me life reading it!!!!