Death Becomes You - Comments

That was incredibly sad! It was right though - it had to be the brother - rather than him suffering even more. I loved that chapter, for some reason I especially adored this line " My heart wildly beating interrupted the silence between us " - I love the imagery - it's great :)

Cannot wait for more...as always... :) <3

Nailed it. ;)

Despite the fact that I fully expected it, I didn't know the HOW - and I actually found myself crying this chapter. =( I feel so bad for Lane, left with a drunk for a father and now, likely, incredible feelings of guilt. The poor girl...

I can't help but wonder where you're going to go from here. Azrael said he wouldn't visit her again, and yet...where's the story if he doesn't? Will she seek him out? Will he be unable to stay away from her? So many questions!

I'm off to sob grossly into my pillows now. Wonderful chapter! <3

Just like the comment below, I adored that you've sent us in spirals, trying to work out who is going to die. I love how the tension between her and her brother, although not verbalised, hangs over the chapter with a looming ferocity.
Cannot wait to find out what happens next! :)

I thought we were going to see that next death in this chapter, but I'm glad that we didn't. It's nice for things to be dragged out a little, and you're doing a splendid job of it.

You're also doing an amazing job at sending my mind in circles, trying to figure out if it's her brother or her father that's going to die - or even if anybody's going to die at all! D=

Still absolutely loving this story, and can't wait to see more!

Gods, this is amazing! The plot, the characters, everything! I'm definetly going to rec and subscribe.

Wow, I'm blushing here. o.o Thanks so much, love!

This chapter was short, but it was filled with everything that it needed. Not-so-fun fact, I lost two of my grandparents this year - so I absolutely felt this family's suffering through all of this, and I just wanted to be there to support them. Because that's all you need when Death is about, isn't it?

I didn't consider that Lane might die, but now I'm wondering about that. My gut is saying it will be her brother though, seeing as he's supposed to be dead anyway.

God, I love everything about this story.

Also, loving the new face! Gorgeous. XD

i really like the descriptive way you explaiin everything and the people, especially him. it must be really sad to have seen so much death especially at such a young again, and then she realized what he was doing around! sheesh. that's a real ominous sentence, there.. he won't see her again? i bet he does. (i'm commenting as I read, i'm sorry!) i just wonder why he changes faces? will she ask him or will he tell her? i'm really, really digging this story now that i've had time to really read it! i can't wait for the next update! great job so far, darling!

I adore this story and can't wait to see how you develop it. I love the ides of the changing faces of death and the trench coat instead of the typical black cloak/hood combo!! - I cannot wait to see what happens next!! :D :D :D

Have you ever read a story and just loved it so much, for its wit and simplicity and absolute amazingness, and just wondered, "Why didn't I think of that?" That's what I'm feeling right now. This is such a simple idea, such a brilliant topic, that I'm absolutely jealous I didn't come up with it myself. XD And I think that's the highest praise I can give anybody!

I thought Death was going to seem like more of a background character of sorts when I started reading this, but I love that he appears to be developing a relationship with this girl. I love that he chose to warn her here, instead of letting the whole thing come as a shock, and I love that he said he would see her in a month's time.

But I have to wonder at the why there. Is her brother going to kill himself? That was my first thought. Then I wondered at whether something might happen to her father, but my heart leans more towards her brother.

But then, I might be completely off track. Maybe Death's just going to pay a social visit. =P

I am absolutely loving this. <3

THIS IS SO GOOD <3

Thanks for the head's up that this was live! =)

I'm really liking it so far. It's really gripping and it makes you wonder. It also, in part, reminds me of The Book Thief, which I absolutely loved. <3

I can't wait to see where you take this! I'm seriously excited for it!

I love how Death is cold but kind at the same time. You make him seem human and real. It's amazing and I can't wait for the next chapter!

I love how Death is cold but kind at the same time. You make him seem human and real. It's amazing and I can't wait for the next chapter!

I really like this story!! Can't wait for the next chapter!!!

I really like this story!! Can't wait for the next chapter!!!

I really like this story!! Can't wait for the next chapter!!!

Dear god I love this. I truly do. I didn't move my eyes off the screen once.

Your words....god, your words are so envy worthy. The way you pick and choose how to use words and phrases and metaphors. It's amazing. And you make Death seem so...human. So kind, but also distant. So hot/ I mean, c'mon, with that kind of detail with his walking how could you not think he was smokin'.

But seriously, you have a gold mine as far as this story.

And Lyra makes a good point. How come she's the only one to see him? I'm looking forward to figuring that out. This is already so wonderful.

This is really, really, really good.

Your summary was intriguing. I love your description of how he made his way through the crowd, and his elegance and grace. He's a character I can't wait to read more about. He appears to have the odd ability to comfort while being emotionally detached from the situation.

The second chapter was equally good. She witnessed sucha traumatic event at a young age, and it's obviously going to effect her. I wonder why she could see him when noone else could, and I want to know if it's just that she's observant when others aren't, or is she's supernatural/psychic?

Your writing is excellent. You have a real talent!

I'm going to recommend and subscribe. This was great. Well done.

What a great start to your story, I was hooked. I'm yearning for more. The words flowed perfectly with each other. Your layout was AMAZING by the way. This is a wonderful plot to write about.

nice! update soon please!! and if you can check out my original fiction too