635798 - Comments

Here as a part of your Comment Swap. If you could comment on this story of mine, that'd be awesome. Thank you (:

I read only the first chapter, but I fullyi intend to read the rest when time allows as this story is so good thus far that nothing I could ever say could express that properly, but I'll try, so here goes. The technical aspect of your writing is on point-- just the right amount of description written in the right way (great use of imagery through metaphors, conveying emotion, etc.) balanced with the dialogue, and although that sounds simple and like a given, you'd be surprised how many people struggle with it, but you seem like a very seasoned writer, so I'm sure you know what I'm talking about. I also really loved the tone of the chapter; everything happening was so chaotic, yet was depicted in a way that made it all seem so calm, if that makes sense. The use of irony in that sense was an excellent choice because it made the chaos seem that much stronger, yet also gave a sort of detached feeling that kept it down to earth. Another thing that I enjoyed was the way 635798 was never given an actual name besides her number. Doing so truly did strip her identity because if you had named her, I know I would have continued to know her by her name rather than her number, and this way makes it feel all the more authentic. Lastly, your writing style is phenomenal: simple and to the point, but still very powerful and emotional kind of in the same way I was talking about earlier with the calm feeling.

I just really want you to know that, although this probably doesn't mean much coming from an amateur writer like myself, that I think you truly have what it takes to become a published writer, and I don't just say this to anyone. I hope that sometime in your life you find this success. Best of luck to you! I'm sure you'll be hearing from me here again. x

Did not see that one coming! Now is the time for his father to finally do what is right. I have to believe that together, they can save her.

Random fact: They mention Mengele in the pilot of "House." I was watching season one the other day and caught that and it made me think of this story.

Mind. Blown.

He stood up to Vater!
Oh, I hope they save her!!

O.O OH. MY. GOD. MAJOR. PLOT. TWIST I am soo excited for next chapter

Okay, so I just want to say that historical fiction is amazing and I'm totally a junkie for World War II era stories. And I can really tell that you did your research for this. Props to you, I'm sure this was a lot of hard work!

I knew that it wouldn't be then end, it was too quick of an ending - though it was more of a likelihood than anything of them getting caught. I'm just super excited to see what you do next with them because they are in a hell of a pickle, especially with that Artz Mengele.

I'm so glad he found her! Thank goodness! And OH MY GOD, she spoke!

I hate his dad. I mean...I just really freakin' hate his dad.

She spoke!!
Oh my gosh. I hope Wolfgang gets her out of there!

@ SmallWonders
I'm beginning to remember him being mentioned in my class now xD

Sorting out as in Wolfgang becomes an instant bad ass and kills everyone who hurts Six? Yes.

@ A S K I N G .
Actually Artz Mengele is real. He was a real nazi doctor who actually experimented on twins during the holocaust. He's famous for his brutality

It's Six, it has to be her.
Can I just kill Artz? Can I just-just murder him?
I know he's not real, but the fact that all this nonsense was actually done to an extent in real life is just heart breaking. It's so horrid and unbelievable, but some of it actually happened.
That realism, although it sometimes makes me sad, is what I love. I love that this is realistic, that the characters are three dimensional. I love that you're making me hate characters so much.
I love this story.
I'm looking forward to see what's going to happen next, even though it will break my heart.

AHAHAHHA SHES ALIVE <3
I know it's Six, it has to be :D

Whoops! Sorry for the double-post.

Obviously, I assume it's Six being experimented on, but it could also be that girl that Wolfgang let go when she was about to be killed...And I can't decide how I feel about this, because if it's Six, at least she's alive. On the other hand, she's being tortured and is unlikely to survive the experiments (unless, of course, Wolf frees her--*fingers crossed*). You're toying with my emotions, lady! Lol. Still, I love this story so much!!!!!! <3

I love this story, so much.

You sure know how to twist and pull on a girl's heart strings. And I bet you enjoy it. If I haven't commented before, let me apologize because I am beyond obsessed with your story here. WWII always fascinated me, and you pulled me in with this taboo love between a Nazi and Jew and I just can't get enough of it. Pretty sure I cried at one point reading this, not gonna lie. Keep up the beyond fantastic work, my friend!

Agh! Noooooo

You can't just leave it there!!!!!!!!!!!!
Please God, don't let her be dead...

You have to update soon!

Wait... WHAT?!
No.
No.
No.
Nononono!

NOOOOOOOOO.