Good Girl - Comments

@ Rick Grimes;
Oh, thank you! I'm glad to hear that!

@ Rick Grimes;
Oh, thank you! I'm glad to hear that!

I'm really loving this so far! I enjoy the description you used and as far as I could tell there were no errors. Wonderful job! I'm definitely subscribing

Even without the little warning that you gave in the summary, I could immediately tell that this story was going to be far from PG rated just because of the picture that you used in the layout.

I have mixed feelings, however, about the lack of a summary. I always like reading the summary of a story before I actually, you know, dive into reading the chapters, but I think for this story, I feel like it doesn't really need one. I feel that the picture and the layout itself is enough of a summary to show the reader what kind of themes are going to be in the story itself without having to explain anything or potentially give anything away that you wanted to save for later.

What can I say about the first chapter? It was very fast paced, to me, and to my surprise, it only took me a few minutes to complete. Everything just seemed to move so quickly even though only a few things happened within the chapter. Maybe it was because I just wanted to see how either of them would react to each other? Or I just wanted to finish it to see where it ended? I honestly couldn't tell you.

I really liked the interaction between the two. To me, he didn't seem that interested in hearing much about herself since his answers seemed a little short. But it could have been because he needed to go to work or something. It was interesting because they seem like such different people on different levels of status. She seems like a normal girl, going to college, while he is a very important person who is always busy with his work, basically married to his work.

I love how innocent the first chapter was because it really set up the relationship between the two as employer and employee without delving into anything too dramatic. But I'm sure the rest of the story won't be that innocent, am I right? But seriously, the first chapter is wonderful and the story itself seems interesting to me to want to know what happens next.

@ robynaicila
Yay! Me too hehehe. Ugh I keep going over in my head how NOT to make it like 50 Shades, ya know? I decided to go with the house keeper plot too because that other one I discussed with you, just wasn't coming to me when I sat down to write.

@ Southern Queen
Thanks bby.

Aaaaaah! I'm so excited for this story

YES IT'S FINALLY OUT <3 I love it so much so far.