Anger Is a Gift - Comments

Another awesome chapter, I liked seeing the party event from Kayden's perspective. It put an interesting spin on the story, I think. Keep it up!

@ petra ral
Thanks so much for the feedback! We really do appreciate it.
Much, much more will be revealed about Kayden and Ava in future chapters, don't worry about that! It's great to hear that you're intrigued about Ava and I really hope that you keep reading so that you can find out more about her. I only hope we can live up to your expectations in our future chapters!

This is so well written, it's great.

First of all even though it's written by two different authors, you couldn't even tell; the two of you, your writing flows together so well and so naturally that it is greatly consistent. I loved all three chapters and Kayden seems like he has a lot going on we don't know of yet, like why he is following Ava and how does he know and just who really is he, but I really like the Ava character.

The first paragraph of the second chapter was definitely my favorite. The way you described Ava in the moment at the party when she was dancing and everything that was around her was magnificent.

The one line that struck me was this one: Are you proud of me now, daddy? I’m kind of enjoying being this imperfect daughter you and mom made me out to be. . As a reader, it makes you question so many things about Ava's life and what she has been through and what it has exactly made her out to be in this moment and why she is now 'Subject 4202'. She just seems to damaged and like she has a huge background and so much back story and from that second chapter alone, it makes the reader want to know so much more!

@ This.Useless.Heart.
Thank you for being one of our loyal readers for these 3 updates! You can reccommend the story to (mibbian) friends, we can always use the exposure! Glad you liked it this much!

I have a feeling that I'm going to wish I could recommend this story more than once every time you guys update.
I really liked this update though! I'm very intrigued by whatever Kayden's mission is, like why he's been watching Ava, and also I sense there's a lot more to Ava than just a party girl.
Keep up the good work.

@ chelseycate
Thanks for commenting! It means so much to know that you're enjoying the story so far. And as for the reason why Kayden is watching Ava, all will be revealed...

Okay, so I'll be honest. After reading this chapter I thought to myself, "What if we all have someone like Kayden secretly watching us and observing us??" Very thought provoking. In all seriousness though, what I loved so much about this chapter is that Kayden knows Ava so well and she has no clue. Here is someone who has watched her, learned her, and is now speaking face to face with her. In just three chapters, I think you did a great job of relaying the significance of that. Ava definitely seems like a sassy girl and I like it. I also love Kayden's character. Still so very curious as to why he's been observing her and what exactly is going on. Great job; can't wait to read more!

My favorite line was, ..."their bodies drinking in the blasting music as enthusiastically as they were drinking their alcohol."

@ tentail
Thank you so much for reading and commenting!

It's been some time since I last read this story. But still enjoy it :)

It's been awhile, but I still enjoy reading this story. Like always, great job :)

@ This.Useless.Heart.
Thanks so much for commenting! It really means a lot to hear that you're enjoying reading our story, I can't thank you enough.
I hope you enjoy our future chapters just as much, if not more!

This is really awesome! This is probably one of my favorite stories I've read on here in a while, for real. The summary is excellent; it immediately drew me in and made me want to read. (It helps that I love science fiction and think George Orwell is bloody brilliant!) Also I don’t usually comment on layouts because I don’t tend to care about them much, but I have to say the layout to this story is really, really cool. I love the premise and the tone of this story! It’s already so fascinating from chapter one; I can only imagine how the rest of the story will be! Chapter two was also interesting and intriguing, but in a totally different way. Stories that switch perspective between characters can be very hit or miss for me, but I really think it works for this story so far.

I really look forward to reading more of this! Kudos!

@ Lady Nikki Nightmare
You have been so good for me, my writing has improved quite a lot since I started co-writing again! You will get to know Ava a bit more in the next chapters; and I'm afraid those other questions need time to answer haha. And yeah I have a weakness for the word 'had'. I usually have you to warn me! I'll keep it in my mind the next chapters I write!

Ava the partygirl... we'll see haha

First I love your layout. It's really cool. Second, I love your summary. From the beginning you just want to know more. Plus I love George Orwell.

Now moving on. The first chapter made me curious. Kayden the CIA agent. Why is he in this file room to begin with? What kind of work does he do for the CIA? What in the world is the LI experiment? I know answers will come soon enough, but still... A girl's curiosity has been peaked.

As for the second chapter. Ava just draws me in. She makes those party girls seem like legit people that you want to listen to. I want to know what's going on with her. Why are there all these people around her. In this new aged the government knows your every move world... why in the world is she at a rave?

I'm liking the feel of this story a lot. But I knew I would because of all the wonderful things Leanne said about it. Just a warning though... Be careful of your use of the word 'had'. It gets annoying if you over use it. Other than that... Great work guys!

@ Alex Moore.
I will subscribe so I can get back to it when I'm not so busy! It's great so far and I'm definitely interested! :D

@ Indigo Umbrella
Thank you so much for the kind words. I hope you will continue to read and meet ava. (maybe not at her best hour, but please meet her anyways ) we try to get this not to crazy science fiction world in order and I hope we do well enough for this genre.

@ swell
The title will make sense later on, trust me haha. It might take a little while but it will make more sense. I am so humbled by these comments. Makes me feel warm inside. Would you please keep reading?

With such a title I didn't expect this kind of story to come out, but I'm pleasantly surprised. I love that it's kinda like a spy story, but it goes into more details than just your average 'I'm a kickass human being and this is what I do.' I love that you didn't begin the first chapter as I did this and I did that, you gave a bit of background info that was relevant but kept me interested. I'm intrigued to see how the CIA and Kayden and Ava all come together and what Ava actually did. This is written so well and I am very interested to keep going and find out what happens!

Wow, great start! I've only read the first chapter so far, but it's very interesting! I love science fiction and the direction the story is heading. It leaves you very curious about what the government is actually keeping from people, but it's interesting seeing the other side of that. How he's so amazed that about the past's lack of government surveillance. His curiosity should lead into a cool story and I'm interested to see things from the perspective of Ava. Great job!

Also, the layout is beautiful! (And the grammar, flow, and style is perfection.)

@ The Alpha's Angel
You really make my weekend! I am so glad you like it. When we write another chapter we will post immediately! I think it will be somewhere next weekend or so! We have a lot of great ideas and are working them into the story! Again thanks and keep reading/commenting; you bright up my day!