Anger Is a Gift - Comments

As always this is very well written, the description is great and creates the right images as I read, which is always good. The flow is perfect and I think you've got a strong start to something that could be amazing :)

@ LadyBatCat
Thanks for commenting! I'm happy that you found the chapter gripping, that was definitely what we intended, haha. :) And you'll be seeing much more of Ava's character in the coming updates!

@ chelseycate
Thanks for the comment! I'm so glad you liked the chapter! And I really hope that we can make Ava live up to your great expectations. :3

Good chapter! I feel it set up Ava's character well, and though I usually find myself skipping over most parts of party scenes in stories, I read every word of this one. I like her wild attitude and wonder how she will be once sober, haha. I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter!

Good chapter! Probably one the most well written descriptions of a party and being drunk I've ever read haha. It was very spot on. And I like her, she's wild and rebellious but I think she'll make for a great character. That cliffhanger though! Ahh, I want more chapters! Haha.

Favorite line: "Something inhibiting my ability of rebellion."

@ LadyBatCat
Thank you so much for the feedback, we will take a second look at the sentences and see if we can make them less choppy. Next chapter will be up around next weekend I think!

It's been a while since I've come across a Dystopian story that doesn't seem to follow that typical Young Adult fiction setting. This one looks good so far! I love the prologue; it set out the story background well and now I'm definitely keen to read what happens next. There are some neat touches here and there, and the layout is beautiful as always. The only minor issue is that some of the sentences are a little choppy, but otherwise it's really good!

Looking forward to reading more!

@ Artist Vs. Poet
I am so glad my good friend is our first commenter. This story isn't getting much coverage yet but I am so glad I can entertain you with what we written. For all I care its only you we can get hooked on it; I'll consider it a win.
But of course, if you know anyone that might like this also; feel free to steer them into the right direction ;)

Okay so I don't think I can explain in a comment how excited I am to read this story. After just reading the prologue, I'm hooked.

I loved Kayden watching the archive footage and seeing how things were back in the day. Especially people not needing to scan in to buildings. A great touch!

Obviously I'm curious about Ava and I'm excited to read more when you post! The layout was very nice and I loved the characters you chose. Great job overall!