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  • Evra Von

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    this is like twilight.... -ticked off facial expression-
    August 22nd, 2008 at 01:32am
  • Fang-A-Holic

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    This story reminds me too much of Twilight
    Short version of what I think
    June 14th, 2008 at 06:36pm
  • Fang-A-Holic

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    This is a good story, but it followed the entire plot line of Twilight much too closely. Mike was like Jacob in New moon, just maybe not as close as Bella was to Jacob. Aden was obviously Edward. Candace was obviously Bella. Esme was Amy all over again, and the brothers were Jasper and Emmett and Alice and Rosalie though Alice and Rosalie weren't girls. It was basically a short twisted version of Twilight where everyone has cool powers.

    I hope that didn't sound very offensive, but I just felt like I was reading Twilight a fourteenth time. You do write very well, but try to be a bit more original going by your own story line and not by a worldwide favorites. I know eveyone loves vampire fics now, and yours was good, but too close to the original.
    June 14th, 2008 at 06:35pm
  • ciao bella.

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    Wow. I just read it. I had to catch up from that large mass-chapter-posting awhile ago. I loved the ending. It was just... wow.
    June 14th, 2008 at 04:49pm
  • KillerRed27

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    dude i frickin loved it
    June 14th, 2008 at 03:54am
  • TheOneYouForgot

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    YES YES YES!!!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE write a sequel...... PLEASE!!!
    Your story was really amazing and I really DONT want to leave the rest up to my imagination!!!! please do a sequel......
    June 12th, 2008 at 08:50pm
  • Night Hunter

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    I know!
    June 12th, 2008 at 03:38am
  • ciao bella.

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    Wow. 51 chapters? Butter you up, you are on a roll!
    June 12th, 2008 at 03:25am
  • ciao bella.

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    I looked this morning and was like

    O.O

    "look at all the chapters."
    June 11th, 2008 at 06:16pm
  • lethalkissesxx

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    im hooked.
    this is one of the best storied ive read.
    keep it coming!
    June 11th, 2008 at 04:19pm
  • Night Hunter

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    Thank you!
    June 11th, 2008 at 06:00am
  • drop.dead.delicious

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    I <3 this story.
    Dance
    June 11th, 2008 at 05:18am
  • Night Hunter

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    That's nice.
    June 11th, 2008 at 04:37am
  • SammieScream!

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    This story reminds me too much of Twilight
    June 11th, 2008 at 03:31am
  • Night Hunter

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    I am so sorry people! I completely spaced and forgot to add like five chapter after Chapter 15. If everyone could plaes go back to 16 and read agin, I think you will get it. Once again. I am really sorry.
    June 11th, 2008 at 01:12am
  • Night Hunter

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    Sorry, I'll go change that.
    June 11th, 2008 at 12:37am
  • ciao bella.

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    question mark? Why are chapters 16 & 17 exactly the same?

    EDIT: Double post, sorry. My computer's acting wierd.
    June 10th, 2008 at 11:25pm
  • ciao bella.

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    question mark? Why are chapters 16 & 17 exactly the same?
    June 10th, 2008 at 11:25pm
  • ciao bella.

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    Teehee! This story makes me giddy as a schoolgirl! (Wait, I think I AM a schoolgirl! o.O)
    June 10th, 2008 at 08:53pm
  • S1lver Ey3s Bl1nd

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    Hurry up and write more PLEASE!!!!!!!!! Your stories are A.M.A.Z.I.N.G~~~~~~@~@#@!%@#$%#@%^
    June 10th, 2008 at 07:40am
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