Forbidden_Samurai / Comments

lol lizz, why are you frustrated?

I know! that is precisely why the idea was so appealing because of the direction it could lead, i dont think it would work as well within a poem structure to be honest but thank you for the idea =). besides, doesnt look like its going to go anywhere anyway because 'stories' like that aren't really allowed on here- they tend to get deleted so i guess its a no go. Ah well! Hope youre well darling. x

Thank you for the poem comment(: It means a lot.

Ah totally didn't see your comment til now! Thank you so much for the comment on my poem :) You're awesome :D

Hey Lizzy Liz Liz!!! Look. I just read your comment and you made me laugh, I wonder why you can't leave comments? Hope u figure it out!!! And than you again for your comment on mine!! I always love your opinions

I'm still trying to figure it out. I kinda miss the old one to be honest. This is just...I don't know it seems impersonal and lacking in creative flair. What about you?

btw, what do you think of the 'new' mibba? =) x

Lmao I never changed it liz I messed with the HTML thingy and it just looks a little different LOL

No problem about the comment! I really love good poetry, and I like to let people know when I like it. I try to leave good criticism as well, because I also would rather have that than a 'cool' or 'I like this.'

You're welcome :D It turned out really well. I liked it a lot. And don't worry about the punctuation all that much, it's mainly just a personal preference I have more than anything else that I thought I should mention :P

So you're making a novel?!?

Thanks for the comments on my poems ^.^ Means a lot since I've been doubting my poetry lately. Especially that last one I made. Though 'whet' isn't a spelling mistake, it can be used to mean a starter or appetizer so I meant it like that as it is a shorter word and also gives an image of the word 'wet.'

And thanks for the welcome back! It's good to be back :D Now though, I have to stalk you poems to see if you've made any while I've been away ^_^

Sweet that's pretty cool thanks for informing me ^-^

YAAAAAAAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! im so glad its finally up!!!!

no problem!

hear* =_=

I forgot two lines. -_-

"Absent I may be from outer-space.
But I live within every other place."

Hey there. :) Ah, nah you're allowed to be pushy. I was being a naughty partner. Excuses are inexcusable (lol), but I have been really busy so forgive me for the lateness. Although it was my week off from uni, I've been working every day well into the night so I had no time for much except sleep. Luckily, I got the day off - well, my ride didn't come through so I couldn't go to work heh - so while I did my laundry, I thought up a few lines.

Let me know if it doesn't flow okay? I'm not sure the lines are in the right order, so if you think it should be rearranged, tell me. :) I'll try to be available when you reply.

Without further ado, here it is:

The voice of the wind am I?
The friend of creatures of the sky.
The fish without me do survive.
But others take me when they dive.
A newborn child will ask for me.
Just like the leaves of every tree.
I surround the world like a giant bubble.
And if I leave, there will be trouble.
I cannot die, but I do know death.
He follows me with every breath.
Sometimes I'm accompanied by a stench.
Polluted or perfumed like the French.
I'm in the stomach of every balloon.
If you can abuse me, I make a tune.
I'm sometimes drawn when emotions rise.
At times, let out by sheer surprise.
I often pass as a gentle breeze.
Or violently fly like a nasty sneeze.
Although I don't weight much at all.
I'm capable of making anything fall.
My existence none can dare deny.
Though I've never been seen with a naked eye.
I'm here. I'm there.
I'm everywhere.
You're very welcome.
Sincerely,
Air

Thank you for the push. I haven't written anything in a long time and I was afraid I lost the talent. ;) Can't wait to here what you think!

Hey u!!! Thanku! I'm liking the profile too. Yeah , the tree thing didn't work out so well do I changed it, prefer this one. But I love yours!! I'm guessing you love the show "Bones"? Lol

hehe im glad u get it, i used good twice cuz i really had no idea how to express myself, sometimes you wanna say something but you just cant find the right words that fit what your feeling? lol anyways ill probably edit it and change the line to avoid further confusion xD

Thank you so much for the poem comment! I will definatly take pointers from your comment!

Thank you for the comment on my poem, I didn't really expect a crit or review of that calibre but i take into account what you meant. What I mean by 'when your good isn't good enough' is that everyone has insecurities and when you think you've done something that is good but then you realize that there is someone who could do it way better and you feel like your standard of 'good' is not good enough? I dont know how to explain it, i found out about a girl whose born the same year as me and wrote a best selling novel at the age of eleven, she now goes to harvard university. I felt as if my standard of achievement was significantly lower than hers for example, i set the bar pretty low to avoid disappointing myself and high expectations usually lead to just that. Anyway thanks again and i just felt like explaining myself