Raging Eyeliner / Comments

'Gah'? Are you mocking me, lady? lol

And yes, it means that you are doing everything right. Now do you believe me when I say that I [b]live[/b] for this story? I've been re-reading it over and over.

Even though it's something I probably shouldn't be admitting. It seems I have no life =D

Omygoodness! So many thigns to say!!
First of all, you are most definitely welcome for the threats. That's not the last of them lol

Secondly, VersaEmerge. My God, are they amazing. I find it weird that you put them in your A/N and I've been listening to them non-stop...'Clocks' and 'The Hider' gah. Oh and yes, Freecell is very addictive, so I do not blame you whatsoever, for not updating sooner haha

Onto the story! Yay!!! You did Jimmy and Zacky's pov! You have no idea how ecstatic I am that they figured out that she didn't betray them. And no joke, my heart was actually pounding during Zacky's pov. Don't ask me why, I have no clue but it was..And the whole Brian/Zacky brother thing was awesome. I love that Brian isn't head over heels for Toni like the rest of 'em..Makes me wonder why. I can't wait until they find her and she gives them hell...Hopefully. Keep 'em coming! Next update sooner? Yes? lol <3

Holy shit.... :DDDD That was awesomeeeeeeee! Seriously! Glad to see the other point of views. I was wondering what was going on through Zacky's head. Anyway I agree with the chick below Sssaije! "cannot wait for the next chapter" doesn't even begin to cover it. :D

Anya! Where the crap are you, woman?

Thanks for commenting back, I really appreciate knowing that my comments are read :).
I figure since you put so much time into writing the story for all of us to read you deserve something longer than "can't wait for the next chapter!". Plus that doesn't even begin to cover how excited I am to see new chapters.

It's no problemo :)
It probably is just a phase, like you said. I'm glad to hear you're not ditching the story! I was seriously worried about that, 'cause this is my favourite story.

I think you should do both point of views because as I was reading the second chapter, I was wondering if Brian thought Zacky killed Toni or something like that. I wanted to know what was going on in Brian's head and I'm sure other people do too.
I'm so excited for Zacky! Yay! I honestly hope he's realized that she didn't betray him afterall....

I have no clue what your thinking. That chapter of Excuse The Obscene was amazing! I can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter! Hopefully there is Zacky! :]

Okay 3 things.

1. I didn't get the email for the second 'Excuse the Obscene' update, so you should re-post it. I came to re-read FYF and saw that the second chapter was up. Hehe fate rocks and mibba's weird.

2. I think you are an insane woman for thinking that this chapter sucked. As I was reading it, I actually thought the opposite, no lie. The first one was pretty good too. You could rewrite it if you want, just to satisfy yourself but you are not allowed to take the story off. Ever.

& 3. OMFG BRIAN && JIMMY!

That's it. I'm done. Oh wait. That was a really vivid fight scene. You wrote it really well. I imagined it exactly like a movie :D I can't wait to see where you go with this story. Is Zacky coming soon?

The sequel so far is awesome. I can tell this story is going to be as fantastic as the first one. Good thing Toni grew a pair and got tougher. :] And I think the title My Little Crime. But that is my opnion. :D
Keep them coming!

Aw man, it's out and it's awesome. One chapter and I'm already in love with Drew lol (But that doesn't mean I want Toni with him)
I like the title better than the other two...I feel like there's another title/avenged lyric that's more fitting but I can't remember what it wass :( I'll tell you when I figure it out.
And like everybody else, I like that you're not making her kill Zacky. That would've been too...Overdone? Yeah that's it.
I hope Zack realizes that he was wrong. Please, please don't drag that out. I beg of you, please!
Can't wait for the next one!!

Thank God you're not having her kill Zacky, it would've been tacky beyond belief, and I loved it btw. :D
Emily x

Really, exellent story, plot and characters ! Very realistic and stuff, fucking awesome !! The end is quite surpising though and I can't wait for the sequel to come up !

is it coming soon?!
sequel noww?!

It was brilliant, can't wait until the sequal,
Emily x

I AGREE TOTALLY WITH BITEE.ME.!!!!

OMFGGZZZZ! >.<

THAT WAS SO AWESOME!

but it made me shudder, when men get mad it makes me shudder...

bleehgheg

but i love you, and im soooooo glad youre doing a sequel, mafia stories are the best

I LOVE YOUUU!

XXXX

HOLY HOLY HOLY HOLY HOLY SHIIIITTTTTT! Dude! That was one of the best mafia avenged stories I ever read! Seriously! I was like craaaappppp! Zacky don't believe it!!!!! But he did GAHHHH! I cannot, I REPEAT cannot wait for the SEQUEL! Please make it quick!!!!!!!

Yeah DUDE I like...nearly freaking cried in that last chapter
And I don't cry easily
I was all 'noo Toni :('
I was fucking...begging Zack not to believe it
And when she sold the bracelet I was all =[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[
When you gonna write the sequel?
Oh my gooood I begging you aha
I'll freaking...write anything you want if you want something lol
:(:(

And it's over... :(
But I'm super excited for the sequel!
So, I'm not really sure which chapter was my favourite because there were so many but I can tell you why I loved the story so much: Toni's feistiness, Zackys dominant personality and the fact that the whole story was unpredictable. I never knew where you where going! Hopefully that's enough for you :D Once again, I must say: I CANNOT WAIT FOR THE SEQUEL!

yeah sorry for putting that on the comment page buuut it's edited now!!!

Are you serious?! There's gonna be a sequel??? Yayy!
I honestly hope they don't think Toni is the one who leaked anything....
Anyways, great writing, as usual : )