hey i think this is such a good story:) cant wait for you to update
June 10th, 2009 at 12:15am
Exactly what I was going to say.
- bohemian_love:
- Alright, here is my opinion on your work. Keep in mind that it is just my honest opinion, and not intended to offend. I came across numerous grammatical errors and spelling mistakes, too many for me to remind you of the correct spelling.
I read about your condition, so I understand your mistakes. The constant description of every detail was a tad overdone. Every so often is fine, but not every other paragraph. It almost got to a point to where you were repeating yourself.
You should organize it better, since it was a little hard to keep up with. My interest dwindled some after the first few paragraphs.
I hope this helps. I'm sorry if it sounded rude!