You're a very talented writer, really. The idea you have is good, I don't personally think it's cliche at all. I haven't read a story like this before, but maybe that's just me.
You've got a totally different plot that ventures away from everyone elses and that's what is going to single this story out and make it unique and very well liked, if not by many, by us. =))
I think you should continue writing as you've already got me hooked.
I like the idea of this story. I'll admit, I was expecting a cliche. Especially with the "girl" bit in the summary. But I'm impressed. I mean, your writing style is not the best I've ever read, but its good. It's simple and clear and to the point.
I'm also quite impressed with the way you set the scene and brought in each character. I've never read this plot before, which makes me very happy. =) I really like how you brought in Billie Joe's family and his circumstances and stuff. It's cool. Tre Cool, even. </lame>
Take care
xo