Soul Salvation - Comments

I love how you describe things to the point of being picturesque. It's amazing, just like this update.

Ah, some of her ghostly encounters remind me of my own xD
Yea, I believe in that stuff.
lol

Still great :]

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Ooooh wonder what's making all that noise? :tehe:

I also must point out this line: One was a rather quiet girl with red hair and braces named Mariah, and the other was a short, skinny girl with flaring brown hair named Samantha.

I LOVE the way you describe people. It's so simple, yet effective. Enough to let the reader picture what these girls look like. ^^

Woooooooooooo LOVED IT!!
Mhm, yes I did. x

Amazing story!!

I am in love with this storyline... are you going to do a flashback sequence? This is so intriguing... I can't wait for more!

Maybe she couldn't have asked. -- assuming it's meant to be 'shouldn't' instead of 'couldn't'?

"Really?" Rania asked, though she felt very skeptic about it. -- don't know if you were going for skeptic, but skeptical would make more sense.

"I assure you, Rani, no one died I this house. It's not haunted either. It juts looked a bit run-down -- the second 'I' should be 'in' and 'juts' is 'just'. And looked should be looks? I wasn't sure about that one.

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Indian food looks so gooood. As soon as I finished the chapter I looked up all the food you'd described and it all looks delicious - espically naan!

How is Rania pronounced by the way? I've been wondering for awhile.

And I love how she is so intrigued by the history of the house. Personally if I'd heard that about my house I'd be sleeping with the lights on eeevery night, haha.

I eat naan all the time man, I love it.
I love indian food xD

Awesome chapter!
I'm curious to see what else Brian decides to do :D

Loved it!!
I'm very intrigued. MORE!! x

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Hmmm...Interesting. Can't wait to learn more about this house.

The way you described her room and the way she reacts to the weird happenings is amazing Mandy. I really love how you neatly brought it to a close... on a slightly eerie note too. Amazing, =)

Favorite chapter so far
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Juuust would like to point out before I continue commenting.. you wanted to know about spelling errors, right? Ok, so twice in this chapter "paint" was spelled without the "t" so it was "pain".
Then in the second last chapter, (I think when she was looking in the mirror?) it says "I" when it should be "in".
You said you wanted to know, right? ;)

ANYWAY, I love the description of her bedroom.. the light mint green and crisp brown reminds me of like you're describing a crunchy chocolate bar, lol. A Peppermint Crisp! Have you ever tried one? They're awesome. :D

I also like how she's unsure of the things that are happening; kind of telling herself that she'd done those things just to put her mind at ease. I do the same thing when weird things happen in my house.

Can't wait for more!

This house sounds epic indeed. I love how descriptive you are with these stories, and I'm addicted already. So... more soon, yes?

The house sounds EPIC! I would so love to live there, haha.

Seriously though, you're amazing at describing places and scenery.. I feel like I'm there the way you do it. :)

LOVED IT!!
LOVED IT!!
LOVED IT!!
CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE = ) x

Oh how I wished I lived in California :'[

Brilliant.
The house sounds pretty fricken sweet xD

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