Sweetie You Had Me - Comments

i might possibly die without an update soon :(

omg this story is amazing. i love it. good job. i hope you update soon. im so addicted to this story.

Also, I agree with Tyson Ritter about the long sentences. Still, really good.

Go Fall Out Boy, even if Pete's being a bitch. =)

Can I just say how much excited I was when I saw you updated?
Because I was. Very much.
I like Pete's character. Reminds me of Grumpy or Grouchy Smurf for some reason.
Poor Brendon is desperate, I just want to kiss him to make it better.
And William... Oh dear, I can't even describe how much I love his character.
The only thing I might not liked is the fact that the sentences are kind of protracted, if you understand. Not in a wrong way, just like:
She felt as though she couldn’t speak, and so she didn’t, but she soon regretted her choice when she felt William’s hand move to touch her neck, and by it, he pulled her off the ground as she struggled for air, as he suspended her above the moldy stone. It's okay, actually, but it just seems to me that you could make it into maybe two sentences.
But I loved it. I like the intense suspense through entire chapter

love the update :D agh grrr william grrr :D

love the update :D

This is great.
Please let Julie be ok. =/
♥

Okayy so I've caught up again.

-Ryan's past has been revealed.
-Jon's dead!
-William has julie. =o

That's a lot of drama in a few chapters, keep it up. =]

You're welcome:). It's an amazing story, so I'm glad I can be a beta reader ^^. And sorry for my English... sometimes it can be a little confusing and hard to understand;p

This story is great! i can't wait for an update:).. btw, do you still need someone to do the "beta reading" for you?

Hey you guys.
I just wanted thank you guys for all the comments. I really, really appreciate them. :D
I also wasn't sure if all of you read my author's notes, so I wanted to post a semi-important link to a journal I wrote for you guys. Check it out!

sorry I somehow got unsuscribed :(

it just got ten times better ;)

Wow this was amazing and really descriptive (:
And awfully dark.

I loved it ;)

Wow, didn't see that coming.

love the update :D

noooooooooooo william has julie :(
noooooooooooo jons dead D:
love the update though :D

Nooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!
What happened? I need to know. You can't just leave it like that.
Okay, now that that's out, onto the commenting.
I like the conversation and the bickering between Brendon and Pete. Especially when he called him 'Peter'.
And Pete haven't drink blood since the'60's? Makes you think how old exactly he is, and how long does this war is going on.
I really liked it, and you need to update frequently, because I'm holding onto this story 'till the end.

YOU KILLED JON.
I loved a little background you did for Ryan. It was sad, yes, but it was very beautiful.