August 15th, 2009 at 04:20pm
Sweetie You Had Me - Comments
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*subscribes* There you go you've gained one too. =]August 13th, 2009 at 06:46pm
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amazing as alwaysAugust 9th, 2009 at 07:58pm
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I like this. More please. xDAugust 7th, 2009 at 02:00pm
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Yeah, it's pretty lame when you're writing a story and can't connect it to the some of the real life stuff. Like A&K or any of the bands.
But nevertheless it was great.
Just one thing. You seem to switch POV between first and third. I noticed in some parts you talk about Julie in third person, like a narrator addressing to as her, she , but then it's like she's talking about herself I, me.
Like this
“Thanks Missy,” I said, turning my face away so she wouldn’t notice my blush, because then she would know a boy had something to do with the hat. She set her stuff down underneath the counter. Missy and I chatted about random things between checking out customers. Before we knew it, the day was coming to an end. Jazzell hadn’t come in today because of her “family problems”. Julie hoped she was okay.August 6th, 2009 at 02:10pm -
I like this story!! Maw. The idea is awesome, I'm going to read the whole thing right after I finish writing this.
Keep updating! I need them!
-Em
P.S. Speaking of Panic! At the Disco, do you mind if you tell me what you think of this? Only thing that comes to mind is that yours is way better :DAugust 6th, 2009 at 12:51pm -
Haha, it would be actually nice to see Brendon playing cello.
Great updateAugust 3rd, 2009 at 11:07am -
im hoping youll be at chapter 10 by august 4th
its amazingAugust 3rd, 2009 at 12:37am -
It is about vampires, right?
You said it's based on the "16 candles"July 31st, 2009 at 02:12pm -
I liked the beginning of this.
But then again, anything that has to do with the vampires excites me.
Don't know why though
Just one thing. Can you lighten up the font a little? It makes it hard to read.July 31st, 2009 at 02:10pm
i love this.
cant wait untill you update