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Out of Friends

I loved how this chapter started. It’s the first time that we get to see Ray kind of undone. Yes it’s happened before, but not to this extent. Ray is finally up against someone who not only knows everything about her, the real her, but also some who is just as good (okay maybe not just as good) at manipulation. Ray has finally met her equal in a sense. Someone who could potential destroy everything she worked so hard to fix. I fucking love it.

This line was my favourite in this chapter: “It would not be long before I would find myself gazing into those dark, demonic eyes, contorted with nothing more than unforgiving, unrestricted malice. And she was right: I would have no one when that time should come.”If I could marry these words, I would. You have such a brilliant way with words. I get pleasure from reading your stories okay, I mean the stories are awesome but I get pleasure from the words and word combinations. I should stop saying pleasure now...

I love that Ray finally realized that she does have an ally, someone she can come clean to. Some she can trust, even though the situation is fairly sensitive and everything can go really bad really quick. Ray is finally becoming...human. *gasp*

I'm happy he's going to help her but sad that he wants her to leave when everything is said and done. can't wait for the next :)

holy mother of walarus.
I'm so excited.

But you took suuuuch a long time to update, I thought I was going to die.

Patrice frusterates me because he's an awesome charater, and she is and now he'd telling her to leaaave. Shes needs a group-thing. I think she needs them.
MEEEER

Wow! Harsh ending for her. Maybe she will take forever to fix everyone and spend lots of time with him and he will change his mind about her leaving. Loved the last couple of updates. Keep up the fanatic work!!! :)

aww that's sad.

ahhh omg poor Patrice :(.. can wait for the next one :)

yeeeeeeeeeeeeeees.

I'm so excited.
Your story is awesome.
Your awesome.
Life is awesome.
It's all... awesome. Because you updated!

yeeeeeeeeeeeeeees.

I'm so excited.
Your story is awesome.
Your awesome.
Life is awesome.
It's all... awesome. Because you updated!

ahhh ohmygoshohmygoshohmygoshohmygoshhh! I hope everything turns out in Rays favor

And she has friends... She has an entire organization of minds just as advanced a my own, a whole organization's wealth of experience. And I have myself... And only myself.
But she has Bergy. And Bergy, when tempted, could smash anyone.

Milan has thankfully changed for the better, but not without a want of trying and the ability to trust in this ring of friends and in I, an intruder. Lex loves Blake, but for obvious reasons can say nothing of the topic. Blake is off getting his jollies through "Tera", who is actually my own demon from the past... And I fear that Patrice is damaged goods, unsure of himself emotionally and rather uncaring of such crucial aspects to a confused human heart. It, I admit, is my fault.
Wow. Talk about having a lot on your plate. Although she, and admittedly you, have to understand eventually that not everything is her/your fault. Sometimes things just happen. Call it fate, life, the heavens, whatever, but sometimes things just... happen.

From my seat up high I felt as though I was perched on a pedestal, looming above the puppets to whose fates I held the strings; because essentially that's all Blake and his friends were now: Puppets.
Wow. That is the most incredible image/comparison/whatever-it's-supposed-to-be-called-because-I-can't-think-straight-right-now ever. So descriptive and epic and sdkfjksf. You're awesome.

That sounds awkward. Hahahaha
I meant MY jeans!
I know, I know. Just get back here already. I told security you're coming so they'll be looking for you.
Someone's impatient.
Someone is really slow.
I just LOVE the banter between these two. So fantastic and well written. Definitely sounds like a conversation we'd have, though. Except for the attire part. I am not a professional athlete and therefore do I have a jersey, and I would hope that you are not stealing my pants. Because that would be a bit beyond awkward. Especially since, y'know, we live on opposite sides of the country... I'll just stop.

You look good in my jersey," he commented with an almost friendly smirk, "Well, better mine than Milan's. Or Krej's. Or anyone's, actually."
FRIENDLY smirk. I see what you did there. Clever.

"Except mine!" Savvy sounded from seemingly out of nowhere.
And once again, 5-year-old Savvy strikes again!

He was truly loved here; something I had only ever watched from the sidelines.
Which is why they NEED each other! Rina, tell them they need each other. Wait, no, MAKE them need each other. You can do that. You're the author. It says so right at the top of the page.

"... No matter what happens from here on out, know that I have never steered you wrong or would ever intend to hurt you. You are no longer my weakness, but a strength. Which I guess.... Well, I guess I should talk to you about."
Foreshadowing much?

"Because tonight, kid, I have a lot I need to tell you about. And not a lot of time to work with."
WHAT?! SFKJSKDHFKJDSFH NO! DON'T STOP! KEEP GOING! *cough* that'swhatshesaid.

Holy snot a lot happened in this chapter. And guess what! My brain isn't hurting! Maybe it's because I haven't truly absorbed everything, but still. It's progress, right?
Anyway, this was fantastic. As usual. I have yet to read a failed piece that you have written.
This was a great, busy chapter, and I can't wait until the next one comes out.
Love you bunches! You're an amazingly awesome writer. And person.

yayyy! can't wait to see what happens when she tells him the truth...... I was gonna comment on your profile but I couldn't figure out where to do it lol so I'm gonna comment here. you are not a worthless fail. personal life should always come first before anything else. if you ever need someone to talk to (sorry if this is creepy lol) I'm always here for you.

eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee you updated!

dude,
i love it.

so I was bored a couple of days ago and decided to reread this little masterpiece. seriously, you NEED to update I'm dying over here. please please please pleaseee? :D

this story is just... omg.. I can't figure it out and it's killing me lol. can't wait for the next chapter :)

Amazing story with such a complex storyline. Detailed descriptions of every scene. Each chapter is written brilliantly with beautiful flow and tranistion. Cant wait until the next update.

I love the story!! Keep up the awesome work.

You wouldn't have the will-power to stay up?
I'm fairly sure I didn't have the will-power to stop!
Also I'm currently in maths and not paying attention. Wow, my commitment is amazing. No, i'm joking about it being amazing but I actually I think I need to get my priorities straight. O_O

Oh my god the way you write is wow. And this story holy shit it's great, I can't even. Honestly, speechless. It's 2am and i'm up writing this comment after reading 29 cause I can't stand sleeping knowing I haven't finished all I can. That is how great you are. And now i'm gonna be dead in school but I don't mind cause this story is so gooooood. Please don't take a month to update or something or I might do something drastic

Also, how is it that it's been almost a month since this was released and only one other person has commented? This is ridiculous and I will not stand for it! EVERYONE IN THE WORLD NEEDS TO READ THIS STORY!