so i started to read this and not only do i like the writing style and story so far i realized you have quite the nice taste in music :D it's been a while since i've found another person that likes joanna newsom, among the other artists anyway good job writing and such, i'm really enjoying it :]
I really like how chapter thirteen was focused entirely on Dave and Felix's relationship, then fourteen focused on Alex and Felix's. It was interesting seeing how both relationships are changing, but in such different ways.
This update left me smile-y as this story always does:D So Dave has an infatuation hmm, or I'm drawing conclusions, but either way I love this whole heartedly.
WHOA, I missed a lot of chapters. Haha. I'm too tired to do a review over the chapters I missed, so I'll just pluck out some lines that I absolutely adoreee. <3
“You’d think that you loved books more than me”, I pouted shamelessly and then leant closer, “you have a man crush on the alphabet, admit it. ADMIT IT DAVID ROALAND SUMMERTON!”
This made me giggle so hard. :3
There was a sleepy atmosphere in the car, the morning light keeping the chill at bay and I felt my eyelids begin to droop as Kelly and Julian commenced their own renditions of old Beatles songs, voices wailing together.
Iunno why I like this part so much. It just makes me smile to see them all together and being happy again :) Actually, I pretty much loved all of chapter twelve. It was so happy and just... yeah :3
BABY, this story is fine. It became much more focused on friendship, and that's perfectly fine. I totes agree with a_living_death. :D just keep on doin' what you do, girrrrl. I'll always keep reading ^____^
Wow. Beautiful, beautiful. You have a fantastic ability of description. With telling all the slight details, but leaving enough for imagination. Best line to me so far, "It tasted like a promise." Do continue, I will be anxiously waiting for an update.
I think what makes me like this story so much is your style of writing.
I agree with burningkohl, some parts get hard to follow, but that makes it seem all the more interesting. It's more like you're inside Flick's head then just observing. I don't really know how to describe it. And then all the small details you add in, like Dave's messy hair from the headrest or how the light shines on his face, it just adds so much to the story. You're an amazing writer (:
I'll always love how this story leaves me in another world. And the chapters are fine m'dear, absolutely flawless, don't know what your talking about ;P
Your writing style is obscure, really out of the norm. It's a bit hard to follow at times, but I think that's the point. Your characters are interesting, likable, hateable, memorable. These are key things in writing, to make the reader connect with one or more of your own muses. Your sentences usually flow, and when they don't it seems to be intentional.
All in all, I think you're doing a rather stand-up job. Bravo, keep up the great work.
I've just begun to read this story, and I am blown away by how amazing it is. You are an exeptionally talented author, and I can't wait to read more. :D