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Wonderful ^_^

WELCOME BACK! :) I hope you had a good holiday and sorry about your finger! Hope it's better. I've been studying for past few hours and I'm tired as hell, so this review will be really short )x

Anyway,

This is probably my favorite chapter right now. It's the most beautifully written, in my opinion. Sarah seems interesting, I like her. My favorite part of the chapter, however, is near the ending, the scene between him and Alex.

It's so pretty. :( like, aslfhsdg;. My heart hurt throughout the whole scene, to be quite honest. It was just so... amazing. You described everything perfectly, as always. :D

We were so insignificant but he was terribly important.
To me.
My heart... ;___;
It's so beautiful. Probably my favorite line in the whole story (for now)

More soon, when you can! :)

that last chapter was beautifully written. well done ^_^

I really like this story so far.
"We were so insignificant but he was terribly important.To me." I loved that line <3
Your writings and descriptions are wonderful (:

I can't even begin to explain how much I love this story so far.
You're a very good writer (:

I'm in love with your story, please update soon x3
:)

you need way more comments for this. <3
update soon?

I love this :)
Youa re an amazing writer!

I didn't have time at all this week to read the updates. T_T But now I can! Yay. :3

Chapter 7

He took a step away from the sink and I must have made some sound because he turned quickly to look at me, his lips parting with the start of some word that failed to pass his toungue.
He stood there and looked at me and I stared back, my face still squashed against the doorframe, my body not quite brave enough to move. His expression was fragile, breakable, a childlike nervousness that I recognised from his sleeping face. His chin was jutted out foolishly, his eyes widened almost owl like over his reddening cheeks, the steam from his drink curling around his eyelashes.

So simple, so nice. I wonder what the word that had failed to pass his tongue was... The way you described his expression... oh my God. It's so beautiful, how you describe things. Especially that part. His face just appears in my mind. I'm constantly like D: when I read your writing.

I'm so glad you had a lot of dialogue in this chapter.

He looked tiny then, even with his towering height, thin boned and breakable and he left me struggling for breath when he spoke again.

“Get out”, his voice was so small that it seemed to take up no room at all, but it flooded the inside of my chest and left me gasping.

ASFHD_G{RW)EOH:#GH. OH GOD, MY HEART. This little part just makes me </3. Really :'( but on the other hand, I really like the and he left me struggling for breath when he spoke again line.

And the last part. Oh, God, the last part...

It tasted like a promise.

So simple, but it said so much. HOW DO YOU DO THIS DAMMIT. If you were to write a scene where someone falls down a flight of stairs, it'll probably sound like the most beautiful thing in the world. :']

Chapter 8

I don't have much time to do a huge review for this chapter, but I have to say that I absolutely love Dave. I think he's like an older brother who's tough and gets defensive when it comes to his younger brother, but when they're all alone, he's a big cuddle bear and whatnot. Haha, but that's just me. Does Dave like Flick? It seems like he does, but we'll just have to see.

Great job on everything! More soon, hopefully? <3

Aww nice tender moment between Dave and Flick. It was a sweet bestie moment lol

ah so Dave likes him...hmm am I wrong?

Awesome. And that is all I have to say, :D

i like this chapter...kinda confused on dave and alex's relationship though
i like that you had more dialogue in this one

already in love with the way you write this story

So poetic! I love it!

Pwitty pwease, keep writing!

E.

ahh I want to see alex again. at least we know where his house is. :) we can just show up. and be intrusive. fun fun fun.

This story leaves me in another place, seriously it's that good. Like...whoa.

Ugh, I am soo in love with this story. I Look to see if it's updated everyday.

Keep up the good work!

-Bethanie

ummmmmmmmm in need of more info to understand

Aww they both have sleep troubles!! They're soul mates ^_^
that or they just have ALOT in common. Although i don't know much about Alex (hehe thats my name :P) so i can't really judge.