The Last Goodbye - Comments

I cannot say how crazy awesome this story is. I love how he keeps pretending he doesn't like Delaney. Are you going to write the cabbie thing in at some point? Because I could see some girl freaking out over Kaner getting arrested. That would be hilarious.

Omg, I am such a fail at keeping up with my subscriptions. Okay, TWO chapters. Here we go:

I absolutely looove how persistent Burr is. "Maybe we should live out your fantasies." HAH. Oh, Adam. If he said that to me, I would waste NO time.

And I also think it's sweet that Kaner wants to get to know the girls a little before elimination, so he doesn't have to pick based on "hotness." At least, I think he's being sweet. Lmfao.

Okay, there is no way I'd be ableto date Kaner if I was FIVE years older than him. I'm a year YOUNGER than him and I still would feel like I'd be too old for him.

Although lately I have been quite attracted to him.*cough*

Don't ask.

But omfg. How sweet was he with Raylene?? AWE. Stud. A stupid,blabbering stud, but a stud none the less. =)

Can't wait for more!!

*facepalm*

Patrick, you're an idiot, lol

But I still love you anyways. More soon??

Dude, I'm with Georgii.
Delaney is SO into Kaner.
She was practically drooling over him while completely ignoring Bur.
And her 5 years excuse?
Lameeee.
Age aint nothing but a number.
Anyways, props to Kaner for getting rid of the annoying ones and not the normal ones like Raylene.
More soon. <3

Delaney is totally into Kaner. She'll get with him, Adam will be heartbroken, the guys will fall out and Pat and Delaney will break up making this story have a sad ending. Perhaps?!
Anyway, I like how he's getting rid of the annoying ones and hopefully he stays true to keeping Raylene on the show a while longer.

Awwww I like the girl at the very end, the one that was all by herself! and omg if Patrick Kane was on the bachelor I would be the first to sign up

Even though he and Delaney are going to end up having sex in a closet because she can't stand how cocky he is, I will still marry him. Especially if he cooks

He should just get rid of all twenty skanks right now and marry me.
Duhh.
:)
Loved it, again!

Okay, I don't know if it's my imagination or if it's you, but I kind of feel like something might happen between Patrick & Delaney.
Then again, he didn't exactly give the best impression with the answers to her questions.
Typical guy.
More soon. <3

Great chapter! I can't wait to read what happens with the picnic.

See, this is part of the reason why I love Burish (even though this isn't a Burish story, and is fake - I can still picture him being like this) =]

Oh Patrick. She doesn't want to date Burish, what makes you think she'll fall for Burish's personality in your body?

Reality shows must pick the dumbest girls they can find - really, who needs more than 15 minutes to throw on a bathing suit?

wow that was intense!!! Love it!

Patrick is such a dork! *Snort*

I love it! This is hilarious!

Loved the update! I thought that Patrick cooking was one of the cutest things ever, though I'm not sure I can actually picture that. Out of all the girls, Kristalyn and Raylene were definitely my favorites.
Can't wait to read more soon!

I love this, but I want to see more Kaner/Delaney action! Ahh anticipation..

Wow, Patrick's cheating on me... With twenty whores...

I can't picture Kaner making himself lunch. MAYBE fixing a sandwhich or one of those microwave meal thingys, but I can't see him actually using appliances and cooking. It's weird, LOL. It is funny when I picture him in the kitchen with his black eye that he needed a "tinted visor" for, LMFAO. OH GOD. Kaner is a great source of entertainment.

Anyways, I like how Kaner was all, acting better than Burish when Adam was talking about the girls, but then he TOTALLY PULLED A BURISH WHEN HE WAS WITH THEM. Hypocrite.

But I totally liked when Kristalyn and Raylene just went off into their own convo, lmfao! Again, the faces I picture (this time of Kaner) are awesome. Can't wait for more!!

LOL. I love how Kristalyn and Raylene are living every girl's dream having Patrick Kane hanging off of them, and instead of giving talking to him, they're carrying on a conversation with each other. It's funny seeing (well, reading) girls making fools of themselves over him. But, I do like how you've made Raylene the anti-typical reality show girl.

This is so brilliant, I love it. I can't believe how some of those girls would be so forward right away, but I really like Raylene. I hope she's got more coming up in this story.
Patrick choked a little bit, shocked at her forwardness. “With you?” he asked, turning his charm on. “Give me the time and place,”
Bravo (: That is TOTALLY something PK would say. Oh, Patty....

I can't believe how some of those girls were acting around him! And that he was flirting back just as badly, though it is all part of the show I guess.
I really like Raylene (I suck with names, that may be wrong), though I'm trying to figure out why she'd come on a show like this.
I'm looking forward to finding out more about them and seeing what they get up to in the house.