Undream the Echoes - Comments

I adore how you described the plane. You made Charlotte a character and I loved it. So much. Even if she's a plane.

Uhm, hi. I know I've said this a zillion times, but I must say it once more: I love Elle and Liam.

They are so real and easy to relate to. What an awesome date. I want a guy to take me on an airplane ride now...ahaha. I love flying in planes, even though I've only been on one a few times. It's so much fun.

I think these would have to be my favorite lines;

“Your car is a piece of shit.”

That just made me laugh out loud.


The sun is blushing into the sky now, kissing the clouds to a rose petal hue. The faint blue above us is tinted with a blossoming pink color, which eventually turns to coral and then gold as we continue to walk.

Uhm, okay. That is so awesome. I just love that...

Okay, I would put more up here, but it would probably be the whole chapter and then you would be really annoyed, so I'll stick with those two. They were like my most favorite ones. I was grinning from ear to ear while reading this. I feel like such a creep, ahaha.

Awww :)
That was adorable. Liam is so cute with Elle.
The plane idea was really good.
And it's sweet that Liam shared that with Elle.
Their awkwardness just makes them so much better.
Update soon, please.

I love Elle's bitchiness. =]

I really like this story. And like you said, it's about the emotions and not the actions, and i think you managed to portray that pretty well.

m o r e s o o n p l e a s e

i like this story a lot i think it has a lot more meaning that most of the stories i read
Great Update :P

I suppose giving up was the only way to convince her, which in a way is kind of sweet.

Loved the update.

I loved it.
The fact that she gave in when he gave up was classic and totally awesome.
Good job!

I love Elle. And Liam.
They are just so...real.
Definitely worth your embarrasment, ahaha.

I wasn't sure if you meant to say you can have the day off, or something to that effect, when Elle tells that emo boy he can have the day off.

“You can have the off today.”

But anyways, I hope you write about their date...unless you go back to the present or something. I would really like to find out what happens though. :)

:)
This was amazing and I certainly think it was worth your embarrassment.
I love how you described Liam when he was on the steps. It was really good and I totally pictured him clearly in my mind.
I think Elle is kind of a big softie on the inside. Way, way inside, but it's there :)
This story is seriously wonderful and I feel happy every time I read it, even though Liam is going to die. The characters feel very real.
I hope you update soon.

This is so amazing.

I wonder how Liam convinces her into a second date:]

Elle is quickly becoming my favorite character in this.
I like Jason too. Even though he's probably only in this chapter... You should bring him back in more past chapters. Cause he's funny :)
Liam is, as Elle puts it, an asshole and an idiot.
He really screwed up that date. I'm excited to find out how and why she takes him back. :)
Great job. I'm so glad you didn't delete this.

i just found this story and read it. I'm really glad you didn't delete it. I really really like this story and can't wait to know what happens next :)

Aw ahaha.

I really adore Liam and Elle. Poor guy...but it shows a bit of his personality, and the fact that he's so determined makes up for his clumsy ways.

Ahaha, cunt face. I laughed out loud at that.

I don't think it's confusing at all, switching back and forth through the future. It makes it kind of interesting to read, because I never know what's going to happen. And don't you dare delete this! Or I will....do....something....

Well, when I know what it is that I would do, I'll let you know.

Awesome chapter.

Pickles and milk, heh? That's an odd combination. :)

Elle cracks me up, the way she immediately comes up with kid names before she even knows his name, after she just broke up with the man she was going to marry. I find her very entertaining.

I think you made a mistake, in chapter three.

I’ve been broken up with twenty times – might as well make it twenty.

I think you meant she's been broken up with nineteen times.

But I really love this. It's so...real and raw. :)

Oh my goodness, I'm obsessed with this story.
I love your writing style, how you put their emotions into words, and just how the story is paced so far.
I'm dying to know what happens.

Poor Liam. I wonder what happens to Elle after he leaves.

Great update:)

Okay, I love Elle.
Seriously. She's probably one of my new favorite characters.
And Liam, he's pretty cool too.
I think I know what's going to happen, but then again, I think I don't.
Good job, though. I love this.

It's sad that we already kind of have an idea about how this is going to end, but I have a feeling there are going to be a few story twists that we're not expecting.

This is going to be amazing.

hahaha.
elle is amusing :)
i like the names you chose: elle and liam. they sound good together.
i'm already wondering where this is going to go. update soon.