Aurora - Comments

I love this story so much, seriously it's so amazing how you think of such imaginitive details about things I wouldn't even in my wildest dreams be able to create in my head. In other words, BITCH THIS STORY IS GOOOOOD.

I do NOT like Nikolae or Rosalyn.

They make me angry and I feel even more sorry for Aurora. It just seems like she has all kinds of...troubles. But I love how sweet and caring Dog is. I really hope he's genuine. I think he is.

Blue eyes? I wondered, staring at Nikoale's face. Yesterday, I could have sworn his eyes were brown.

That's got me a bit curious about Nikoale. I wonder if he's evil or something.

I do not know. A coward. A liar. Something that can never be what his family needs. No, honestly, Aurora, I do not know what I am. Maybe I am some ancient god spirit of a rock or a stream but now I do not know. Now I cannot remember.

That's so sad. I feel sorry for Dog too. I guess he and Aurora could offer each other friendship and comfort.

I am SO excited about this story and where it's headed. And I love the name Adrian. :)

My first thought upon reading the summary was that maybe Aurora was a wolf, and that she's suppressed it and denied it for quite some time because everyone where she lives is so anti-wolf. I think I'm just crazy, though.

I liked how you started off by distinguishing the Schloss Lunarenstein girls from most other girls. I can't quite put my finger on why I was so intrigued, but I was intrigued, and it made me want to read on.

I find the story of the Moon Queen and the Liche Queen very interesting. The image I picture of the night sky and no moon was creepy and I like it when things creep me out.

When I saw the name of the castle, I was like 'Hey! That means Castle Moon Stone, or Lunar Stone Castle, or something', and I feel like that's significant in some way, but that I either can't figure it out or that it's not meant to be figured out yet. Or it means nothing.

I don't like Delphine. She seems very suspicious to me, slapping Aurora just for asking about her father.

Instead, I made my way to one of the large sitting areas where elk-antlered candelabras and chandeliers glowed a merry orange.
I like how used 'elk-antlered' to describe the lighting fixtures instead of just saying that there were candelabras and chandeliers. It's a simple description but to me it makes the sentence more complex.

The part where Aurora was reading to the younger girls was almost heartbreaking. I feel for her and how trapped she is in her life.

I knew she didn't intentionally try to exlude. I knew I excluded myself. But I felt making a decent conversation much too difficult and I never would have the confidence Magdalena had.
I feel like Aurora is someone that a lot of girls can relate to. Like even though she's a pretty bitchin' huntress, all she wants sometimes is to be pretty like her friends and have a boyfriend.

Maybe it's just me and my imagination being wildly overactive, but I'm wary of Dog. I feel that a talking animal from the forest should probably be avoided, but who knows, maybe he's a good dog. And let me just say that that is one creepy forest, what with the wolves and this Lourdes person and the Liche Queen with her bowl of death tears. I wouldn't even go near the edge.

I can't help but doubt the Liche Queen's motives. She seems very untrustworthy. And that guy from Aurora's dream seems a bit iffy as well. Or maybe Dog is the untrustworthy one, and is trying to turn Aurora against the wolves and whatnot. I like how there are so many different things to be construed from this story.

Blue eyes? I wondered, staring at Nikoale's face. Yesterday, I could have sworn his eyes were brown. I said nothing however, just mumbled a slightly embarrassed 'Hello' upon entering. I probably had just been too far away yesterday to notice that his eyes were blue.
That's kind of strange. I don't think she just failed to notice his eye color; I think they really did change, and that's awesomely creepy in so many ways.

When Dog says that Aurora smells strange after being around Nikolae, it seems like more than just a dog noticing smells. He hasn't said anything about the smells of the others, so why should Nikolae be any different? I have a feeling he's eeevvviill! (Haha. Okay, I am having way too much fun with this. xD) And now I don't trust Rosalyn either, because she's consorting with possibly-evil Nikolae. Or she's just a slut.

Either way, I am very excited to see where this story is going to go. :)

I am completely in love with this story! Please please please write more soon!!

I didn't like Nikolae from the start, there's something about him that isn't quite right, am I correct? And Rosalyn, well, she's a slut, but I can't seem to hate/dislike her. She seems like an interesting character.

I wanna kiss Dog :)

Have I mentioned I love this?

Oh, I love, love, love, love, je'tamie, aishite imasu, 愛しています, amor, LOVE THIS.

Sigh.

Awww. I love Dog :)
And I hate Nikolae. And Rosalyn. EspeciallyRosalyn.

Well written! :)

That is sooo good:]]

wow, so wonderful :)

ps, you forgot a w, the queen lady says "Now go." ut you have no go.

:)

I am in love with this already!
Aurora's flaws make her so real to me and I love the images I get in my head from your descriptions.
I'm definitely hooked and can't wait for more on Nikolae and mysterious wolf boy ;)

I love your story!

YES.

You updated! :) I love Dog. He sounds so awesome...even though he's a dog (that we know of).
Nikolae sounds extremely attractive. I do wonder what will happen.

And she met the boy in her dreams! This is so freaking awesome.

I love the forest scene.
:)
This is just amazing.

Oh my god this is so freaking cool I don't even know what to say. How do you think of all of this??
P.S. Nikolae sounds extremely attractive

I really like this story so far, im already hooked. cant wait to read more chapters.
: )

I really like this story so far, im already hooked. cant wait to read more chapters.
: )

Beautiful! :)

I truly think that this story is going to be freaking awesome.
It sounds fantastic

This is really well written and I'm already hooked.
:)