Hello My Name Is... - Comments

Wow. This is really good so far. I'm really liking it. I REALLY wanna know what happened. More soon?

*Sakura-chan*

I love the concept of this story.
It's really great so far.

Mmm.
I like the concept.
Im insanely curious as to what had happened too.
But honestly I dont know if Im really feeling it. I mean I like the concept and the characters but I feel like..idk. like you kinda rushed them.
I personally hate character intros. you know heres so and so - she looks like this- she thinks this-
and Im not saying you did that. But its kinda borderline. I prefer to see more through their actions then descriptions. You have four unique characters. I loved the idividual chapters 2 through I think 4. I think you didnt do the skater kid yet right?
But anyway. I think its the first chap I dont like. I dont like the character bio style of it. I wouldve preferred if they were like maybe all in the same room for some reason... You know kinda like the breakfast club! (dont laugh, your as old as I am!) But you know what Im saying.
Like I wouldve made them have a brief scene where each character is described very minimally. Cause in fact youre starting at the end. Youre opening 3 months later so the 'opening' should really be the end. It needs more bang! more like this is the climatic moment! And the readers not sure why, so they read on to find out... kinda like 'lets go back to the middle of the day that starts it all...'
Thats the kinda opening you need... Then I could tolerate bio style descriptions like the next chaps were...
I dont know.
I did subscribe. Mostly cause Im curious as to what will bring them together...
Bleh. Sorry if this review sucks. :/

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...That's awesome.
It's like one whole school rolled into a couple of people. That gangster chapter made me giggle:tehe:

I like the way you've done Alice's perspective. I always thought a prep thought like that.
It feels very real, I can see it happening in real life.
Please do some more ;)

what happened?!?!?!
That is seriously going to bug me.
Please update this soon...?

That was cool. I liked how you showed the downsides to all the groups in the school society. Perfect parallel to what school can actually be like.
I can't believe I'm the first comment on this.

But seriously--please continue. I have an unyielding need to know what happened