Save Me - Comments

I really like this story! I read it, despite the fact that i know absolutely nothing about the band, but I'm glad I did! I really enjoy it, and I will be subscribing! I can't wait for more! Keep up the awesome work!

So apparently, Comment swap told me my comment wasn't long enough, and I sincerely apologize for that, So I'm back to give a more in depth comment. I really like how real this story is, how you put in the aspect of her running away from Social Services, most writers would just have the main character jump into being in the arms of the band they're writing their fic about. Keep up the good work!

I'm back for more! I'm glad Roxy got adopted by Zacky, i thought that was really really sweet!!

I enjoyed this story, because while this type of plot is used a lot, it didn't feel like the same old same old to me. I loved the descriptions!

Comment swap

So, I figure using comment swap you want a real run down of what I think, even though you're doing it for fun.

To start, I only read the first chapter and I found mistakes in spelling. Also, your paragraphs become jumbled, at least to me and that can be confusing.

You are not terrible by any means, however. You have an interesting way of describing. I was not personally drawn in, despite my love for Avenged Sevenfold.

However, write for you, but always aspire to be better.

I would have never picked this story out of a line up, comment swap. I dislike A7x, so I didn't really get that far in this story. I actually did enjoy the writing. It was well written. I didn't spot any errors. Your descriptions are really good. The summary wasn't bad, it seems to get to the point, but it didn't really hook me. Good job, keep writing! :D

I'm really not a fan of A7X, but it doesn't even matter because they way you've written this is thoroughly enjoyable and lovely. Your sentence structure is quite varied which is so refreshing since most first person POV stories I've read fall into the pattern of "i did this, i did that, i said, me me me."
I also love how there was no dialogue until chapter 3. Obviously dialogue is kind of necessary for most stories, but I think it's really great to see a story moved forward without it. Overall, I think this story is coming a long very well and I'm glad comment swap had me read it! :)

Dude please please please I need the next chapter so freaking bad I have to know what the letter says I love the way you're taking this story I like how things seem to just keep going down hill instead of everything being okay once she saw the band

Much <3 Kat

Hey, comment swap brought me here. :) I can't say I'm a huge A7X fan though I had a pleasure reading this. There are barely any grammar or spelling mistakes, which is hard to find nowadays, so for that I give you props. The story itself is very interesting and nice. You're going the right path. Keep up the good work!

I am an extremely hard person to please when it comes to first POV, but dang - I like this. Also, it's been forever since I've actually read an A7X fic that I thoroughly enjoyed. I love the way you describe things and how you don't fall in the excessive use of "I" in order to structure and develop your sentences.
I'm looking forward to more. (:

OK, so I did think that from the summary that this story was going to be a strongly depressing theme wise, but I was actually pleasantly surprise. I'm not an Avenged Sevenfold fan but of course I was impartial to that when reading :p However I was thrilled to read the first chapter because you really pulled me in with the intense action and the running. I recently started a story in exactly the same way and had lots of positive feedback on it and I think it worked really well here too. The whole phobia of the dark things was interesting and said a lot about her, good showing instead of telling in action I felt :) anyway you kept the tension going and the questions building in the next chapter...I was just too drawn in to stop reading! Really good job on that. And the mysterious male who appears to comfort her-- I just loved how you kept it a secret until the next chapter, it really gave the whole story momentum, especially as the chapters are such a good length. Sadly when Zacky finally introduces himself I was a bit distracted by the grammar errors you missed off commas, just little things like that-- but otherwise it was the perfect first meeting! Great job on it all and good luck with the rest of it though :)

wow, this is really good! I don't really read A7x fanfiction anymore, but this is rather good and I'm glad I came across it. Aside from typing errors, I didn't really find any mistakes. I like the way the band got integrated into the story, and I also like how you can really feel how betrayed by her father Roxy feels because her dad was so good to her and such a good part of her life and then suddenly she suffered his abuse. All in all, bravo!

I love Avenged Sevenfold. I really do. I also love this story, a lot. Your writing is amazing, the plot is great, and I love the character. This is a great story. I'd read five chapters before I even noticed it. I'm definitely going to go finish it up and I really hope for the best for Roxy.

I've only read the first chapter, and already I'm hooked! I've recommended your story too! Like other people here, comment swap brought me here, aha. A7X fics are like my guilty pleasure. I like your writing style too, it's very detailed and it talks a lot about what she went through in her past. I've subscribed to this and I'm gonna read the rest now, hope you keep the writing up!xoxo

i guess i am in the same boat as alot of people and not getting comments on my stories, so i decided to give the comment swap a try....and i got sent this story, and i just read it all and i love it! cant wait to find out what happens next!

Yay awesomeness!!!

So I'm in a similar boat as some of the others here, and comment swap dropped your story in my lap. I'm going to tell you a secret. Avenged fanfics are my guilty pleasure. I've read several that I liked and a bunch that were really crap. Yours falls under the good reading category. I like how descriptive you are. And yes...some of the grammar needs to be adjusted, but it's not that distracting. I liked it. And I love how sweet Zacky is. I lurve him, he's my favorite. Keep it up!

No, no, no, no, no, no, no, no, NO. Why did it have to end there?!

I am so into this story that it isn't even funny. I love Avenged Sevenfold and Zacky is one of my favorites. I agree with some of the others, clean up the grammar, diction and spelling a bit and you're good to go! I hope you update soon because I love this story and it's REALLY good. I was a bit hoping it was romance, but I guess this isn't a typical cliche and I was pleasantly suprised! Great job!

comment swap;
Other than the comments you've already gotten about grammar and such, there is no other complaints. I love your style of writing and how you are very descriptive. It really makes you feel like you are in the story and you feel what she is feeling. Try not to drag everything out so much though, sometimes I find myself getting bored if it's the same old story over and over again. Other than that, your plot is amazing and very different. I'm not one for cliche stories. Great job(:

Alrighty... You've got a great style of writing. My biggest thing would be to not use a lot of the words so often, in the first sentence you used carried twice, and there were only 11 words. Second, try and clean up the spelling. That's my biggest thing. Grammar. A lot of times, its hard to get into a story when I keep getting distracted by spelling errors. Anyway, that said, I like the story and the plot, as well as the characters.