Save Me - Comments

Definitely make sure you run through spell check. Self-loating, stomache, monstorous, meerly, etc. would be caught on there, haha. Also, make sure to use semi-colons for independent clauses only, and not to string independent clauses together with commas. That said, the story itself is interesting and engaging. If you work on getting the grammar and spelling cleaned up, I think this could be a really great story! Sorry if I come off as overly critical; I don't mean to. I just figure if you're on comment trade, you probably want real feedback. Cheers, and good luck! :)

Oh my goodness, your style of writing is amazing.
Your words flow together very well, and the voice in this story is overpowering.
I usually don't read Avenged Sevenfold stories, but I must say this one convinced me.

-Jess xx

I can't believe I waited until comment swap brought me here to read this. First off as you can probably tell I am a HUGE a7x fan. I squealed when I saw that this was an A7x story I was excited. I read the first chapter and fell in love, its a plus that your layout is so nice I can actually read it. You're very descriptive (I love that), your plot isn't boring like most and your characters are simply wonderful.. to sum it up. I LOVE IT. Update soon

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Firstly, I should mention that I'm not familiar with Avenged Sevenfold stories, but I can say this was a nice surprise. It's beautifully written, structurally and story wise. I know what's going on without having to know what the guy of the band's personality is like. Good job and I wish you lots of luck with the rest of the story. :)

Hey im from Comment Swap, I've so far only read the first four and a half chapters and i already love it so im going to drop you your comment now. Even though i love Avenged Sevenfold i dont usually read their fanfictions so this was a nice suprise. I really liked how you planned your story and how they met instead of just starting with the straight away. Also i really like your writing style, it keeps you interested in the story and keeps it fresh. Good luck with the rest of your story :)

I like this, has weird as it sounds (: I don't know the band, but you make the story work with them. I don't think your grammar is that bad and I love how descriptive you are. I don't know what to say other than don't let anyone tell you that you can't write haha (: Your writing doesn't need that much correction and I think that people get a bit carried away on here. Not everyone is perfect, well no one is but that's my point(: Keep up the work!

First off, I love the band. The stories about them, not so much. But just from reading the first couple of chapters, I think I would like this one more than most. It seems like you are taking a different view on this story. I agree with the person before me though, you should work on your grammar usage.

I've read the first couple of chapters, and one thing I would like you to work on to better your writing is use your commas in a more correct way. Some sentences you have really need to be broken up into more than one, because having so many commas is often distracting and can take away from the meaning a great deal if you're not careful. That said, I do like what you've done for the most part; you have a great plot and I like it. :) Just work on some spelling and grammatical errors and it'll be even better! Good luck :)

I've only read chapter one and it is very good so far. At first it's pretty mysterious, we don't know exactly who is this person. But as the chapter continues, we get to know more of that character.
Don't really like A7x but I figure this would be a pretty good story.

Keep up the good work!

Wow....poor thing just can't catch a break. Hope Zacky will save he one day

this is awesome, the guys need to come kick some slimy teenage boy ass please!!! more soon??!! :D

Lovee itt!!!

First up, I just knew Comment Swap was going to give me an A7X fic, I just knew it. I'm quite liking the plot - of course, it's a bit disturbing, but you've clearly put thought into it, and the character of Roxanne is clearly thought out as well. The first chapter was well done - I only found a few mistakes, un-familier should be unfamiliar, afterall should be after all, luxery should be luxury, serged should be surged (although the word doesn't seem right in this context - maybe 'burnt into my brain' or 'engraved into my brain'?), and dissappeard should be disappeared.
Other than that, it looks the be quite a good story. Well done on it!

i love how comment swap has brought me here three times xD welp! this is my 20th comment on comment swap. and i still love your story. ive already said it twice...wtf comment swap. still love it :D but! do you? :O

I've only read the first chapter so far, but I wanted to get a comment in before too long. It's a really sad story. You did a nice job of setting up the story to get reader's sympathies with Roxanne. This is some pretty serious subject matter, but you've tackled and conveying it in what seems like a very real and meaningful way. Keep up the good writing!

Ohmygosh this story is making me cry! I feel so bad for Roxanne! I was afraid for a moment in her letter to her mom when she said see you soon that she was going to try to commit suicide or something! Very good story, very captivating! I really hope that you update soon because I need to know what happens next!!!! Don't leave me hanging please!!! Update soon!!

Ohmygosh this story is making me cry! I feel so bad for Roxanne! I was afraid for a moment in her letter to her mom when she said see you soon that she was going to try to commit suicide or something! Very good story, very captivating! I really hope that you update soon because I need to know what happens next!!!! Don't leave me hanging please!!! Update soon!!

i havent read the whole story yet, sowweieeeee! but everyone else seems to love the story and i know i will to. Comment swap got me here and im glad it did :) i hope to read more soon and i know itll be awesome!!!!!!!!!! :D (idk why but this didnt go through before so ima just post it again xD)

<333 Up-date again soon! I'm dying to see what's going to happen next!! =D

i havent read the whole story yet, sowweieeeee! but everyone else seems to love the story and i know i will to. Comment swap got me here and im glad it did :) i hope to read more soon and i know itll be awesome!!!!!!!!!! :D