No Man's Land - Comments

I'm just going to point out the parts that I really liked, because, well, I don't really know what else to say. xD

1. “Who lives in a pineapple under the sea?” shouted Evan, apparently oblivious to the fact that Jackie had come out of the bathroom. “SPONGEBOB SQUAREPANTS! Absorbent and yellow, and porous is he! SPONGEBOB SQUAREPANTS!” This paragraph started the giggle fit for me. I seriously COULD NOT stop laughing until they all got in the elevator. xD

2.“Non-believer!” Taffy shouted, pointing a finger at Evan, his eyes wide. “Shun the non-believer! Shhhuuuuunnnn!” I got it. ^__^

Okay, that may not seem like much, but this seriously was my FAVORITE chapter so far. :D You're such a great writer, I hope another update comes soon!

I love Evan, he's hysterical! Somehow I can see him and Frank getting along really well.

CHARLIE THE UNICORN! I love that video!

Great chapter!

Hi, there I think I already told you someplace else how much I love thsi!!!
Can't wait for moar!

Heh...Frevan...that's hysterical! Evan and Frank do seem a lot alike. :)
I loved the idea of No Man's Land's video, puppets and all.
It's also nice to find something nice written about Alicia, as well.

I liked how, in the beginning, you described what the fans thought about NML. It gives a new meaning, I think, to what the band is.

I apologize for the horrible comment, though I have no excuse. =\

The original musefan:

...wouldn't Jackie's gender be printed on his/her passport? It has F or M on it.

You don't technically need a passport to travel, even by plane, as long as you're not traveling to a different country that requires it, and the leg of the tour that NML will be accompanying MCR on is all in the United States. ;) Therefore, Jackie would have no use for a passport while No Man's Land is traveling with the Black Parade Tour, so there is no danger of him being 'found out' in that specific way.

But I'm glad you questioned that! I encourage any readers of this story to rethink certain actions and complications that come up because of Jackie - no doubt it will make things more interesting, and that will only help the suspense of the plot. :)

Absolutely delightful.
I really enjoy reading this story and I don't start getting bored in the middle of the chapter as what happens in many other stories.
I love the idea of NML's video as puppets.
I really do adore this story.

OOOH! FREVAN!!!! I like that...wowee...wouldn't Jackie's gender be printed on his/her passport? It has F or M on it.

damn =) I love reading anything you write, seriously =) I learned a lot from you over the years and this story just helps me to learn a lot more ^^
thanks jinxeh =D great chapter again, just like always ;-)

keep up the good work hon'

Oh, wow.
Frank is (most of the time) stereotyped into being overly hyper and childish, but it was just so funny how he tried to eat those sugar packets and desperately wanted the camera from behind the counter. :)

I loved how you focused in on Gerard, how he felt, and how he was drawn towards Jackie, that sort of thing. I like the Jackie character, and I'm glad that you decided to use him in this particular story. It really adds to the uniqueness of this story.

Hope you write more soon!

<3 Cherry

OMG! lol
It get's more interasting by the chapter!
ha ha.
You write way better then I can ever dream of writing like. =)

Great story
more when u can plz!!!

good chapter hon'. I read it all before and its still wonderful =)
keep up the good work

I. LOVE. It.
There's plenty of band-touring-with-MCR stories but this one really got my attention.
It's absolutely fantastic, keep it up!
My favorite part was when Gerry's daughter asked if Bob was hot in real life.
Please update soon!

=) great story hon'...I had so much fun reading it on yer lj before =) and it's probably one of the better stories of MCR out there ^^ keep up the good work

The original musefan: Whoo! Lol, thanks for being the first commentor! :) And I'm glad you like my story, thanks!

KellyxHeartsxMCR: Thanks! ^^

Cherry Road: Oh yes, I know what you're talking about. They were my inspiration for this story - I wanted to write one that was a little different from those other stories I kept stumbling upon, and I'd been waiting around to use Jackie's character idea for a while; it seemed like the perfect opportunity to. And thank you very much, for the compliment on my writing style. ^_^ And hey, I completely sympathize about the homework thing - I'm in college, nng.

Thanks, you guys! <3

There may be a lot of "Yeah, we toured with MCR." stories, but I like this one particularly. Although, I don't really know why.

I do know that I like your writing style. :D

Can't wait for the next chapter. You deserve a better, more detailed comment than this one, but I'm backed up on homework and I gotta get it started. =\

<3 Cherry

OoOoOoOoO Interasting! ^_^

Yay! Comment virginity stolen! Loving this *subscribes*