Code of Honor - Comments

O____O YOU BETTER UPDATE SOON!!!! SUCH A CLIFFHANGER!!!!!

>_< bad harddrive.
But good chapter :D

I love the story! But leaving us with that? It's almost heart breaking. =P
The lil moment between the two of them, was very cute.

I'm only on chapter 8 but I already love this story. Riley is awesome =]

I loved this chapter!! The snowball fight was great and pretty hilarious. And then you put in all that action!! I loved it! :D
UPDATE SOON!!!

>.< bad Mibba did not send an email when this updated. But I found it so I'm happy now. :D

AWEEE OMGG have i ever mentioned hooowwwww ush i LOVE riley???? well its alot! lmao

There seems to be a severe lack of dystopian novels in the world (that's why I wrote one myself). When I stumbled upon yours while I was looking through the stories pages, it immediately caught my attention, mostly for that reason.

I've only read the first chapter so far, though I'm sure I will continue on, at least for a little while, to see if it really captures my attention. So far, I think it's quite good. The world you've set up seems very realistic in that you don't overdo anything, but still provide enough detail that I can really picture the area around your character.

One thing I do find myself in need of pointing out though, is that there are quite a few grammar slips. In fact, enough that my brain would stop completely every time I hit one, making it harder to connect with the story.

Usually, these slips seem to be missing commas, but sometimes they're also added on punctuation that doesn't belong. And, in a few cases, even misplaced words (shift instead of sift in one of the paragraphs).

Although, for the most part, the slip ups are easy to put to the back of my mind and move on, like I said, there were enough that my mind couldn't simply ignore them altogether. I think if you get someone to beta read for you, these could be easily taken care of.

As for the story itself, as I said, it's beautifully described, but if I remember correctly from the summary, it's a romance. This is the only thing that would turn me off of the story, as I'm not a huge romance fan. But I will keep reading to see what I think.

OMG!! Are they goign to California!?!?
Update soon!!!! I need to know what happens!

AH!! BAD cliffhanger!
And doritos!!! :D haha.... i loooove them!!! It was a good long chapter!! yay!

=0 whats happening?!?!?!?! AHHH i need anupdate again i really love this stoorryy

where are they going? California?

i love the story , my new favourite one here !

I LOVE ITTTTTT!! i need more not even want i love this storyyy!!!

:) I've missed this :D
Vodka huh? ;P

haha, nice chapter:P

I liked the last chapter, the descriptions were amazing, update soon? Pretty please?

This story is so amazing! I connect with it because it's something that could potentially happen. All of the characters have such amazing depth to them and I can't wait for the next chapter!

I liked this chapter...and it was very well paced :D

Loving this story!!! your doing amazing keep it up!!! :)