Still Doll - Comments

Oh my...Your story is priceless *.*
I felt in love with it, from the second I put eyes on it. Truly one of the best fiction I've read. Keep on the so fantastic work :3

I love kanon! I liked her music cause Vampire Knight....On and Off run hand and hand with her :)

Heyo Luna!
A.) I reread still doll and I still think its awesome!
B.) Noticed one small error in the last chapter, if you go through and read carefully you'll see there's a line where it has ace in it rather than ache...
C.) You removed me from your friends list.
D.) Can't wait for you to post more ^.^

First off, I love the layout.

I liked the summary, too with the idea of the doll. It was good, but a little bit too long for my taste.

I've only read the first chapter. There were a few errors in spelling and grammar and I would point them out, but I'm on my phone and it's rather difficult. Dx

I think the idea is very interesting. I'm curious about the setting and the situation as a whole. The characters intrigue me. I love the last line and how it relates to the whole theme of the story.

Good job with this. :)

♥♥♥♥♥Awesome!!!!! I can't wait for more... I like the new layout... Keep up the awesome work Luna..

You finally update!
*cries tears of blissful joy*

I enjoyed reading this. I've been a fan of stories taking place in the 19th century, and this is just great! I like how you created the relationship between Kanon and Alexander. I think Alexander is really funny too.(teehee). When I first looked at summary, I thought it looked somewhat long, but I actually really enjoyed the detail you put into it. I like the theme of how Kanon was dreaming of freedom, and how Alexander came to help her escape.
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The updates are great (I caught up be reading the last two, those were the ones I didn't read ^_^). I love that Alexander wants her to stay. Ugh, so romantic and gushy. You had me squealing "Awww" to the computer screen. You have that affect. <3 Lovely job Luna, keep it up.

Sorry, the whole comment swap thingy. I forgot about it until today when I was looking through my journals.

It's pretty interesting, I really want to read it. But not know at the moment. My reading mood tends to come in the middle of the night. I only got through the first chapter to get a taste. The name Kanon, very unique I like it a lot. I'm a sucker for unsual names. :)

Amazing chapter Luna, I can't wait for more!

So, I only read the first chapter.

There's a few grammar and spelling things, but there will always be a few in everything. I would mostly go back and look at your paragraphs, the thought paragraphs, for the most part, should be away from the paragraph they are currently in.

It's an interesting idea, I think it could use a little more detail in the events that are happening. It seems that you're just telling instead of showing. Great idea, nice work. :)

Awww, Mai! <3 Love you so much, thank you for taking the trouble of reading the whole thing, unasked even. I'll try! :3

Wait...she's leaving?!
NO! D:
Why didn't she just break down in front of Alexander or something and confess how much she loves him?!
Grrrrrrrrrrrrrr

Anyways, I love the story.
And I stayed up super late, just so I could read it.
You owe me.
Naw, jkjk :3

PWEASE HAVE A NICE, NOT SO UPSETTING CHAPTER NEXT.
PWEEEEEEEEASE :3

<3

I love it so far (just finished chapter two). In my opinion, it was like you borrowed the singer's name and appearance, but the character behaviors are your own...? I like her character development. I'm a big on that nowadays. So far I get a bit about her personality, but not all. <3 It's good.

You did wonderful on the other characters as well. Omigod! Alexander. Yay! xD 'Master' creeps me out.

Awesome plot line so far too.

I really really like this I think the lay out is really grand but I think the part where words are could be moved a little towards the center more. But over all I like this and the feeling surrounding it is inexplicable but in a good way.

Oh, this is quite interesting; I love the doll theme you've got going on. It definitely adds a unique flair, and more than a touch of mystery.
Overall, I like your writing style, and you've got some great lines. However, my con/crit would have to be that when expressing a character's emotion, try resorting to words, not '!?!?' moments :)
Oh and cute layout, too :)

Thank you. :)

First off, sorry for the delay of my comment. I actually read this last night, but by the time I was finished it was about 2:30 am and I felt I should wait to write a comment for when I was fully awake so I wouldn't jip you of anything.

This is a really interesting concept, I'm not quite sure if Kanon is literally a doll come to life, or if it's a metaphor for the fact that she can't remember anything about her past life and is just empty, but either way I think it's extremely interesting and unique. I'm honestly a bit confused about what's going on in the first few chapters. I wish you would have given some back story about who her master is, unless you purposely left that out because of Kanon's lack of memories. I've only read the first three chapters however, so that could be me just missing the development of the story in the later chapters.

I'm really interested in reading the rest of this when I have some more time, I'll be keeping an eye on this story. Keep up the great work :)

Oh, my goddess, Paralove. <3 Your comment made me chuckle and laugh.

I am so happy that you enjoyed the last few chapters so much. I love how you think thoroughly on the ideas for the future. Thanks so much for your comment. <3

Okay, so now I'm caught up. :D
Chap. 18 &19
D: I personally think Cornelia is a very strict woman. And yes, she got me very angry when she told Alexander to kick Kanon out! In Inevitable Departure I felt pity for Kanon and then, angry at her. Pretending she wanted to leave...psh. 'Tis very dramatic Luna. Questions are arising in my head, questions like, what will happen to Kanon-will Cornheadelia really put her in a home, or in the streets? >.> But most importantly, what will happen to Alexander and Kanons romance? The romance must go on!

chap 20 & 21
I really loved how you described Kanon feeling anger and sadness. Also, I loved the oxymoron used when Kanon had said, "I'll be nothing but a forgotten memory soon...". I just found that very well-written, and that it's not a common oxymoron. :) Oh, the similes you use are great as well: His words were like painful blows to her chest; I understand why it must hurt her so much, all this time Alexander has been so kind and now these words seem like a different language to her because he's being so mean to her for the first time!

"Back away," Kanon told him, but her command was only a whisper.
"Why?" He seemed to have enjoyed her reaction.--Heh heh. ;D

*GASP* They kissed. That deserves a double *GASP* they fudging kissed. Aha, awesome opening to chapter 21. I liked how she described the feeling as "falling." This whole chapter made me squeak "awwwww" the whole entire time I read it. xD Well, of course until the carriage was waiting outside for her. T.T Keep updating Luna!