A City of Fools - Comments

I just read your entire story and I love it so much! You are an awesome writer and I love your plot line :) update soon!!!

Alex, quit acting like a Juggernaut!
is that even the right word to use?
i don't know but QUIT ACTING LIKE YOU'RE ON TOP OF THE WORLD.

and i love this and you. <3

So I was like two chapters behind but firstly this made me smile;

'Lauren sighed. “Yeah. Yeah, I guess.” She paused for a minute. “I mean, do you...want to do it again?”

Eli's eyes widened and she shook her head. “Hell no! If I see Gaskarth again, I'm going to smack that damn smirk off his stupid face,” she said.'
Liar liar liar hahaha :) I bet she loved it haha.

and I laughed at this whole thing as well;
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“I'm going insane,” Eli told her. “That's the only explanation.”

“Or you like him.”

Eli paused. “I'd prefer the insane alibi. I do not like Gaskarth.”

“You sure?”

“I'd rather shove bamboo under my fingernails and gnaw my own leg off,” Eli told her.

Lauren shrugged. “Impressive. The amount of torture you'd rather endure than mack on Gaskarth again.”'
You are a genius my friend haha, I love the personalities you write your characters as :)

I totally agree with Jack though, Alex needs to stop playing the untouchable badass card, haha. I'm sure he's a human being with genuine feelings deep down in there somewhere.

Other than that, chapter seven was just... filled with tension aye? haha. I really don't like the way that Eli and Alex talk to each other and treat each other, they're both one worse than the other in my book, you know? Alex shouldn't have snapped like that at the end, but I understand why he did, although Eli just lost her brother she shouldn't be so shitty towards every one. Alex was only trying to be nice and that seems like a rare occurrence so she should have just accepted it and ranted to Lauren at a later stage about it if she hated him that much. I don't know though haha, after all, as I said, he is an ass haha.

Chapter eight was just, wow haha. Are they even allowed to do that? Haha :) Like they didn't even ask Alex if he was okay sharing his experiences with her beforehand in private, and then they moved his class and everything and threatened to fail him if he didn't comply with the assignment and things... nor did they even ask Eli if it was okay with her either. I totally get why they are both so shitted about the situation haha. But Alex should just suck it up and do it. It's so obvious that some where in there hearts they like each other, and is it really worth risking more fights and stuff? He knows what it is like to be in Eli's situation after all, and it's kind of obvious that there's only a certain amount of bullshit that you can take when you are grieving, he should just help her while it counts, and if they hate each other that much, they can stop talking afterwards hahah

Ahh, I love this story, you must update soon, I'm actually so excited. But at the same time I'm devastated because there is only four more chapters left :(:( But I'll count the days until you post the sequel hahaha.
:) Amazing as per usual, <3

and the drama continues to grow! eek, theyre gonna kill eachother at this point! i love this,as always :) thanks for the update :)

brilliant chapter!

noo! finish at 12! =( aww gunna miss it, but love the idea of a sequel! XD yay!

excuse me, miss, but you really need to tell me when you update. (; because my email is super gay.

buuuut, i love this!
and you!
<3

CHAPTER 12!!! That's so short! Please do a sequel!!! I absolutely love this story, one of the best I ever read. Update soon please <3

12 chapters is pleasant but a sequel makes up for it, so that's a plus. I'm interested to know what each of them right about each other and I'm hoping this will bring them closer to realizing that they both went through the same thing. This project is either going to end horribly or wonderfully. I'm excited to see where you take this and I'm really hoping it doesnt end badly. Oh, and did I mention I love this story? Because I do! It's so different and deep and it really goes deep into what Eli is thinking and how she's feeling. Love it! Update soon please!

aw it's ends on 12?

I love how this story isn't the typical love story.

THIS ENDS AT CHAPTER 12?!
awww :(
Cant wait til the sequel then :D

this will always be my favorite chapter. i love how Gaskarth gets at the end.(: haha.

amazing storyy! i love this os much!, alex and eli are gonna fall soon, theres a thin line between love and hate :D brilliant update! made my day

Have I mentioned that I love this? Because I absolutely do! It's amazing and so real and the way you write just makes me feel all the hurt and confusion that Eli's feeling and the anger between her and Alex. I love that Alex is trying to help her but I can't help but wonder why he just won't tell her exactly how he can understand what she's going through. I'm curious to see what the counselor will say to them, I have a feeling though that Eli will find out about Alex's brother and the counselor will ask them to do some peer counseling or some crap like that because they've been through the same thing. Idk, just a thought. Anyways, I love this story and I always look forward to your updates. Update soon!

duh duh duuuuhhhh!

Wow! just wow. Alex scared me there for a sec though. Love it. Update soon please

i will PROUDLY admit that i cried during chapter 6 :')
beautifully written :] *subscribes*

Okay, so first off I will say it simply; this chapter was brilliant although my feelings towards everything are everywhere! In a good way of course, haha. I think all the anticipation I had to endure made everything even better if that was even possible, as well :):)

I really like how Eli has someone so reliable as Lauren in her life, although Lauren must be just scraping the borderline of dealing with the situation as well deep down. I am seriously sympathising heaps with the both of them, Eli a little more of course, but I think your story just highlights the strain put on not just one person but everyone surrounding when something terrible happens.
It really has an affect of everyone and I think you are conveying the emotions of all the characters really incredibly well and I admire that.
Not only is Eli suffering and covered with depression and discontentment, you can see how it is affecting Lauren and how she is trying to make all of Eli's decisions for her, trying to think about what's best, and then you can see how everything is also affecting Jack as well.
It must be really hard for him seeing as he's obviously dealt with Alex's situation and knows what it's like to be in Lauren's situation and what Eli is going through, but he can't say a word out of respect for his own best friend.
Then I can see how it's affecting Alex as well, like he's gone from being such an asshole to actually being relatively sweet, and I guess, like a lot of other people, I wish you could just write him blurting out that he's been through the exact same thing to make Eli truly understand that he is being legitimate when he says that he knows what she is going through.

I think my eyes literally popped out of my head for a couple of seconds and then went back into place after a moment when I read how Eli kissed Alex... and then they did relatively the same thing when I read the bit where he was kissing back... I understand what you mean about 'He was a teenage boy—of course he was going to kiss her back.' That's just such a typical real life thing haha and that's what I love about this story.
I'm on the fence about the next bit though;
I'm glad that Alex didn't let the kiss go on for any longer than he did. Yes, he probably should have practiced more restraint and not kissed back in the first place, but it's better late than never I guess.
However I don't like the way he dealt with the whole situation. He should have explained himself better than the whole "Because this shouldn't be happening." way.
Of course there must of been heaps of shit going through he's mind, and he was correct, it shouldn't have happened like that or at Gabe's funeral of all places and times, but it was as I just said, her brother's funeral, she's upset and hurt and that was a pretty shit job of explaining on Gaskarth's behalf haha.
I'm glad that Eli finally seemed to snap though. No it's not good that now she has one more thing to worry and feel pathetic about on top of everything, but at least she's kind of going through her anger stage. Let's just hope she doesn't do anything stupid.

I'm sorry if I've left anything out, or misinterpreted anything with my stupid mind, and once again I apologise for being such a freak when it comes to your story, but I'll say it a thousand times if I have to; I love this and you are a brilliant writer!
haha
:) update soon.

OMG!! Those last two chapters were amazing. I cried when I read it!! So sad!! Update soon please <3

I looove this story(: It's different, but in a good way. I'm pumped for the next update ^^