The Life of An American Orphan. - Comments

To be honest I had to go back and read the last few chapters to remind myself wat this story was about, but it's a great story so I'll definitely read the remake :-) :-)

This was me reading my subcriptions

(._.) Nothing
(._.) Nothing
(._.) Nothing
(._.) She updates every hour, i'll come back
(._.) Nothing
(._.) Nothing
(._.) Cool, I like that story, i'll come back
(._.) Nothi-
(O.o) Wait a minute...can it be....they updated?
(/O0O)/ Holy shit they did!
(~OoO)~ WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

So um....yea....know that

I am super psyched I can't wait for the next chapter<3

They are so cute . . not gn' lie !!

i like both of ur chapters. keep updating plzz, n 4 ur questions Miley Cyrus, n Twilight all the way. i have a question 4 u: team Jacob, team Edward, or Switzerland?

You have the same problem as always in your story, either use present or past....you often, really, really often switch between those tenses. Sure, you had this chapter completely in present, but the rest of the story is pretty much kept in past, so you should keep it that way too.
Aw, poor Matty....but he really shouldn't have snapped at Jen because of what Val did
It wasn't her fault that Val couldn't keep her hands to herself
I can't wait for more
Hope you update soon :)

Woow, been a while. Loved the up-date, hope you up-date again soon! =)

Nice update :)
I hope Val soon learns to back off though
<3 Michele

Happy birthday!!
dont know why I wrote that but....im not taking it back....anywayy
i vote harry potman...
dont kno why i wrote that ethier.....but...im keeping it...
oh and ur grammers fine....
did i spell grammers wrong.....who cares...anywayy
love the story and the added drama

It really doesn't affect my reading, I just notice this stuff easily as my teacher had hammered these grammatic rules into our brains and I figured I'd tell you to correct it before some a** hole reports you or something. Maybe you could get yourself a beta reader/editor for your stories....

The girls really seemed to have taken it the wrong way at first
I mean, the way Maria and Emily were glaring....
Hopefully they'll understand because if not they won't be the kind of friends Jen needs
She needs friends that support her and not judge her
Can't wait to see what's going to happen
Hope you update soon :)

And Harry Potter all the way :D

Amzing chApter and both !!!!

harry potter :D
loved it. hope the girls are understanding.

I think your grammar was fined :) I can't wait for more :)

Harry potter definitely harry potter
This chapter was a good update!
I am a little nervous about their reactions

I personally didn't find anything wrong with the grammar but one thing i will point out is that when someone laughs, don't write haha, in their dialog. Before the character says something or even after, write 'She laughed' or I laughed. It's just weird to read them laughing, if that makes sense.
<3 michele

None of those two, Miley annoys me and I hate Rebecca Black.....So imma say Demi Lovato xD
Aw, at least Matt told Jen
And Matt made the right desion not to have sex with her
It would just make everything worse
She'd freak out the minute Matt would probably touch her or somehting
She definitley isn't over the rape completely yet
A bit down the road, she'll be ready
I'm really looking forward for more
Hope you update soon :)

Ps. You gotta check this and the chapter before for grammatic mistakes. You always mix up the use of past and present. You gotta correct, as you normally only use past.

Love the update.
awwwww Matt is so smart sometimes. :D

ps, rebecca black needs to never be heard from again!!!!!!!! if I have to listen to "friday" one more fucking time I'm going to loose it......and for that reason i choose Miley Cyrus :D

Do i have to choose either miley cyrus or rebecca black . . . they both suck in my opinion
but i loved the update
and i loved even more that Matt decided not to have sex with her
<3 Michele

She may not be 'appropriate at times' but I choose Miley Cyrus.Also, I loved the update and can't wait for more! : )

AWWW snap!!

Hm, I really doubt that Jennifer is ready yet
After she had the dream about the rape again, she's probably just confused
I really think that she should wait
I really wonder though what brought thi on all of a sudden
If it's really because of the dream, waiting is a better option for her
I mean, hell just in the morning she got scared when she realized Matt was in bed beside her
So, she isn't ready yet
Hopefully he'll say no, as much I think he would want to, Jen is not over the rape yet
Can't wait for more
Hope you update soon :)

Ps. and as for your question about having tips with the grammar and everything.....get yourself a beta reader/editor. That's the easiest thing to get rid of grammar mistakes and stuff. If it keeps getting worse when you try to watch out for mistakes then I'd really suggest that.