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  • souffrir de amour.

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    Update soon! c:
    June 7th, 2011 at 07:24am
  • Marinesister92

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    wow. She's so dumb, i mean yeah liam can be dumb and stupid but he just said the three words that mean the most. GAH what is she doing?
    Can't wait to read more and re read all the written chapters.
    June 4th, 2011 at 03:59pm
  • atomika wave.

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    Hahah maxine's so dumb go liam!
    June 3rd, 2011 at 02:42am
  • BlondeMilf

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    Maybe if laim didn't sleep around she would beluve he loves her..... Love your story
    June 3rd, 2011 at 01:20am
  • Star Angel

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    more please
    June 2nd, 2011 at 10:31am
  • akanevampire19

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    Ahhhhhhh!!!! Why can't she just let herself to be happy??!!!!! Liam said he loves her!!!!!! Ahhhhhhh!! And they are having a kid! =D I'm so happy!!!! I wish she change and be less stubborn!
    June 2nd, 2011 at 07:28am
  • clearlyconfused

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    Omg it's getting good!! =D
    June 2nd, 2011 at 06:54am
  • akanevampire19

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    =O she's pregnant!!!!! =O update soon!!!!!! Pleaseeeeeee! ^.^
    May 29th, 2011 at 04:07am
  • clearlyconfused

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    Can't wait for the next chapter please update more!!!
    May 29th, 2011 at 12:53am
  • dingdongdreamer720

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    I loooove the plot line for the story and it's super intriguing! Unfortunately, your writing and grammar are not exactly up to par. You have a lot of run-on sentences, so it becomes difficult to decipher what people are trying to say. Along with that, your writing style is just awkward at times. It gets to be nonsensical and long winded. Some of the characters' actions and dialogue are unrealistic. I would partner up with someone who's picky with grammar and has a more refined writing style and work with them on it. This story could be so amazing!!! Great start.
    May 29th, 2011 at 12:19am
  • kbrice89

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    I love the layout and the story is FANTASIC!
    I can not WAIT till your update!
    :)
    May 28th, 2011 at 11:45pm
  • Marinesister92

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    I like what you're doing here quite a bit, i recently just read all 22 chapters of this. I really want to know what goes down between everyone and what goes on between max and Liam. GAH! i can only imagine what is going to happen.
    May 27th, 2011 at 08:32pm
  • OhBlake.

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    I love love love love this story!
    I think Maxine should show more affection towards Liam.
    Because, i want them together, (:

    And, i want her mother to die.
    ;D
    May 22nd, 2011 at 04:44am
  • akanevampire19

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    Maxine should forget everything and run away with Liam!!! I know he loves her!!!
    May 22nd, 2011 at 04:07am
  • clearlyconfused

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    Yay your back!! Love the chp =D
    May 21st, 2011 at 10:31pm
  • leileiluv

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    sorry I haven't commented on the last couple of chapters. I have been super busy. Ehehe. I cannot wait for what is to come.

    Hopefully liam and her end up being together in the end.
    May 12th, 2011 at 08:22pm
  • akanevampire19

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    Her mother told the truth!!!! =O I wonder what will happen in the newt chap! =D
    May 11th, 2011 at 07:34pm
  • atomika wave.

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    Team Liam 4 lyfe!
    May 11th, 2011 at 11:46am
  • clearlyconfused

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    OMG I love this story!!
    May 11th, 2011 at 07:08am
  • mgn.

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    She's a manipulative little bitch! xD
    May 9th, 2011 at 11:37pm
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