wow. She's so dumb, i mean yeah liam can be dumb and stupid but he just said the three words that mean the most. GAH what is she doing? Can't wait to read more and re read all the written chapters.
Ahhhhhhh!!!! Why can't she just let herself to be happy??!!!!! Liam said he loves her!!!!!! Ahhhhhhh!! And they are having a kid! =D I'm so happy!!!! I wish she change and be less stubborn!
I loooove the plot line for the story and it's super intriguing! Unfortunately, your writing and grammar are not exactly up to par. You have a lot of run-on sentences, so it becomes difficult to decipher what people are trying to say. Along with that, your writing style is just awkward at times. It gets to be nonsensical and long winded. Some of the characters' actions and dialogue are unrealistic. I would partner up with someone who's picky with grammar and has a more refined writing style and work with them on it. This story could be so amazing!!! Great start.
I like what you're doing here quite a bit, i recently just read all 22 chapters of this. I really want to know what goes down between everyone and what goes on between max and Liam. GAH! i can only imagine what is going to happen.