Life Unedited - Comments

hahah
its a bit of a one sided conversation but it puts a smile on my face anyway :P
And no, your Spanish is not flawed, quite the contrary. The reason I was so curious is because it is very good yet very formal. I only speak like that to my elders or strangers. Teehee. reminds me of how I would speak to my puertorican family. Mexican slang would so not fly with them.
And damn!
Tease and a lil' somethin' somethin'
Dom you lucky bastard

Oh and actually, keep subscribing and commenting this story guys! Life Unedited deserves the recognition and praise. It's too fantabulous to ignore.

I WANT IAN SOMERHALDER IN MY BED. If he's not available, I'll be more than happy to have Dom come along. Or both of them!! The more the merrier I say. (;
Soon as I saw the chapter was called 'Your First'. First thing that went through my mind was 'OMG SEX YES!' Gosh, I'm such a pervert but at least I admit it. :D
Aw, I was tearing up when Carmen was re-telling her past. No-one should ever go through such an ordeal. Mikael is a QT-pie. I wanna take him home with me. (:
“The first girl who has stolen all of my heart,” That boy is whipped! No, I really wish all boys were like Dom. He is such a sweetheart. But you did catch me offguard, I had no idea HE was a virgin.

All in all, in my opinion, this chapter was the best by far. Can't wait for more, hun! X

amazing so far. no joke, i fucking love it <3

lololololololololol.
This chapter made me laugh. I love how Carmen listed how she wanted to be the first girl she wanted him to...well, you wrote it, you know what I'm talking about. Me being the immature person I am, I laughed, though in all honesty, it was cute. I loved this whole chapter. And you did rate it NC-17, so no one should be complaining.

Oh, and thanks(: I'm a mind reader like that, yo.

Which reminds me. My mind is telling me to tell you to update soon. Like, really soon.

awwww.! so cute.! i loved it.! keep updating.!... hahahah.! she almost broke Dom's nose.

You cant see me but I have this giant ass cheesy grin on my face.
I love this story.
One of my students here in China is called Carmen. She is 2 and a half years old and full Chinese so I get a kick out of pronouncing her name the right way and talking to her in Spanish.
Uuuuu! I like your idea for Dom...
Daddy dearest...I hope he gets shot in the knee caps.
Rolling in ze hay! ROFL! Like I said, I am hella jealous.
By the way, I am curious? Where do you get your Spanish from?

I lovee this story. Its amazing,
Update soon Please?

HEHEHE NEW CHAPTER! YAAAAAAAY. (:
I am genuinely scared for Carmen now. Poor girl. I really sympathise with her. I can't ever imagine having to live a life like that. It's heartbreaking that however much she wants to move on and have a future with Dom, her corrupt past always catches up with her. It's like a rainy cloud on a sunny day. D:
I comment because I adore this story. There aren't many stories on Mibba that really capture my attention. I've been looking around for Ian Somerhalder fiction and it's like only 1 in 4 of them are good.
But going back to Life Unedited. I love it and I love you. You are an amazing author and that really shows through your writing. And woo, I'm your cherry to your sundae! You're my macaroni to my cheese.

loved it:D update soon(:!

I read Perfect Chemistry about a week ago and I loved it. Great story =)

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW.
Dominic is sexy. No doubt about it.
Carmen...well, she's had some serious issues. But obviously guys must find her to be hot if she's been raped so many times. Damn. Poor chica. I like her, though. At least she's coping.
OH, I'm a terrible commenter, so I'm going to get to the good stuff that matters.

The plot is really good, and the writing's also great. There are a few mistakes here and there with grammar, but nothing too distracting. So far, I think the characters are developing decently, though I think you definitely could put more depth into them. Why was Greg so intrigued by Carmen? Not that she isn't an intriguing character, but as an officer, he must deal with this stuff a lot, so I'd really like to see more reasoning to that. As for Emma, I'd say she's pretty cool, but again, even as a minor character, I'd really love to see more depth in her. But otherwise, you're doing a good job. This story is addicting.

Update soon, please[x

aaaaaahhhh.!!!!! i loved chapter 11.!!! it was scary when HE came to the school, but then Dom stepped in.!!! whoopie.! lol keep updating.!

This story is amazing!
I always feel like I'm going through what Carmen's going through.
You genuinely scared me in this chapter!!!!
In my opinion, a good writer has to be able to make the readers feel what the characters are feeling. And you do that perfectly!
Good job on this one! I give you props! =)

I lived in Mexico for 11 years. I moved away barely 2 years ago.
I miss it so fucking much. It is the closest thing I have to a home.
I live in china now and people barely speak English let alone Spanish...
Wey...I almost fucking cried when I saw the Spanish in the story...te lo juro.
Needless to say I subscribed.
I have a secret crush on Dominic. I wish i was bad ass like Carmen. And Matty cracks me up.
And I will admit that I am a fan of the flirting and passion between Dom and Car. And by fan I mean...insanely jealous and want them to finally succumb to their lust for each other...

OH. I'm so flattered, but stop with the compliments already! You should be the one that's receiving all the love not me! You don't need me to tell you I heart you lots cos ya prolly already know. (;
Aww, yes, your own children. Well, you created them, so they are yours. THEY'RE YOURS AND DON'T LET ANYONE TELL YOU OTHERWISE!!!

Anyway, my thoughts about this intense chapter:
1) MANUEL NEEDS TO GTFO. ALEJANDRO STOP CALLING CARMEN. (Sorry, I had to put a Lady GaGa twist on it :/)
2) Matty is so darn cute. I think Dom/Carmen and Matty/Bonnie should so go on a double date. ;D
3) I LOVED IT. THANK YOU. BYE.

i love iiiitt.!!!!! u have to keep going.!!!! update.! please.! lol

i lovee your story, keeeep writing(:

I cried during the first chapters!!! I love this story

Hi. Me again. You won't be getting rid of me that easily.
I should be asleep but, I got a notification that this sexy story got updated. And yes, you guessed right...my happy dance was brought to glory.
Aw, I love you too! No, I'm definitely not the best. You've clearly earned that title, sweetie. (:
“I guess you’re not a girl, unless you like sporting tube socks in your panties.” Haha! I love how Carmen can lighten the mood with her humour. I've grown so fond of these characters. To say I love this story is an understatement.