I just read this and I think it's great. You have a few grammar/spelling errors, but nothing major. I'm not a big fan of sequals but I defibitely think you should write one, I dont think you can wrap up June's story in 2 chapters. Great writing :)
Alright, so i have just spend the past couple of hours reading this, unable to stop, this is just an amazing story! :) I really love it :) Can't wait for the next update :)