That was absolutely hilarious. Bryony is a hoot and definitely seems to know Marc very well. I think your dialogue for this chapter was great. The conversation between the three was believable while not seeming forced, if that makes sense. I cannot wait for your next update.
:O You updated like 4 times since my last comment and I never got the emails! So now I read through them all and I absolutely loved 16 :D The one you said you thought was too sweet and sickly(: This is probably my favorite story on this website because you are a fabulous writer and it really draws you in :)
so an idea of where to go now maybe might be to stick with the original plan, because it seems to me the last chapter is them starting over but not forgetting. i don't know if that really made sense...
anyways, i liked the chapter, its nice to read about a boy that understands what is going on in a girls head, usually boys are portrayed as stupid blind fools in the game of love. cant wait for the next chapter.