Life Starts Now - Comments

i really enjoy the description in the story! I like how you describe every last detail without going on and on. i also like the plot of this. it's very well written and thought-out. it's not a story i would normally read, since this is for comment swap, but i might actually keep reading this.

Found this story through comment swap and I like it so far. I will more than likely keep reading this story! You are a good writer and I cant wait to see what else you come up with! Keep up the good work!! :)

I like the description of this story. I really like how you actually describe how the people look. I feel like I can really imagine them well in my mind as I read it. I'm from comment swap as well, but I really think I might read this story for the heck of it. I really like the way you write. :)

I read the first two chapters as I had only put out a short story to swap with.

I think the first chapter could have been made into a character profile that you could have linked us to. It just felt too rigid. There was detail but it felt a little over done, so much to the point of describing wrinkles. I felt the overbearing detail was a distraction from the story and made me want to skip over it.

The second chapter was descriptive and at the start there was some repetition of using 'I' instead of other words, but you really saved the chapter with the dialogue.

You've got very descriptive writing but I think you need to know where to limit it. Otherwise, a good start with great potential!

This is cute. I'm so happy Comment Swap finally gave me a hockey story! Even if I'm not a huge Penguins fan. I love the fact that you're challenging the norms for these stories by having her be devout. (I do that in a different way - most of my OCs are smokers.) Hehe I loved the bit about the truck at the end of the second chapter. My grandfather has a huge Ford something, and I face the same problems getting in. I always have to jump and my sister (she's taller) just climbs in like it's nothing. It's sorta degrading lol.

Hi, I'm also a comment swap :) Ok so, I absolutly love this story to death! You have excellent grammar and spelling. I hate when an author doesn't have either, so seeing you have it really makes it easy to get into the story and not be distracted by misspellings. Good job, I really love this and I'm not even a hockey fan haha.

Also: I really love the plot line. Normally I don't read stories like this and it's kind of like a breath of fresh air ... I don't read a lot of good, original stuff anymore. I can't wait until you update again; I'm really excited to read some more!

UGH! Sorry! I don't know why my comment posted like a million times. ):

UGH! Sorry! I don't know why my comment posted like a million times. ):

Comment swap ~! I finally read through the entire thing and I adoooore~ it! Keep it up; amazing work!

Comment swap ~! I finally read through the entire thing and I adoooore~ it! Keep it up; amazing work!

Comment swap ~! I finally read through the entire thing and I adoooore~ it! Keep it up; amazing work!

Comment swap ~! I finally read through the entire thing and I adoooore~ it! Keep it up; amazing work!

Comment swap ~! I finally read through the entire thing and I adoooore~ it! Keep it up; amazing work!

Comment swap ~! I finally read through the entire thing and I adoooore~ it! Keep it up; amazing work!

Comment swap ~! I finally read through the entire thing and I adoooore~ it! Keep it up; amazing work!

Comment swap ~! I finally read through the entire thing and I adoooore~ it! Keep it up; amazing work!

So I got this story in the Comment Swap thing. I honestly like it. :) I'm not a big hockey fan but this story is amazing! :D I'm on the 4th chapter so far and I'm subscribing. :) I LOVE IT!! Oh and I'm recommending it. Update soon!!

I really liked this story!!!!! You are an amazing writer I can't wait to read more!!!!

Just found your story and I cant wait for more