In Venere Veritas: There are wounds that are not meant to heal. - Comments

Brilliant update, lovely :) Zoe's such a strong woman, a nice refreshing change from all the damsels in distress that we get on here. Keep it up !

Very intriguing. :D
I like it... quite a lot.
I can't wait for the next update!

That was amazing, I loved how you got all the mixxed feelings across, and the arguments between her and Dave.

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-Katie

Oh my goodness, I love it. This whole thing is just awesome. Can't wait to see what Mige was referring to. :)

for being short, this chapter really had some power to it. i'm dying to know just what mige is referring to, of course, but i'll be patient..for a while. :) really, thoguh, that exchange between them was brilliantly worded. very well done. i can still feel the tension

o.O DUN DUN DUNNNN.
Please update soon. I swore to myself I wasn't going to beg, but.. yeah. ;D
I was wondering whether Mige is meant to come across as nice, but wary of her and protecting Ville, or mean to her. So sorry again for being thick. :3 Excellent as always, and even if it was a wee bit short you still wrote it so that I was interested the whole way through.

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-Katie

i liked how ville said he couldn't read her and how she countered back . it was really interesting to see. also the change of time for sound check really fit dave's character. loved it :)

A sweet update, although nothing much went on with the chapter, it was still a brilliant update and lovely to read >.<
As perchance2dream said, it was nice finding out a wee bit more about Zoe and her feelings towards Ville, who seems to become even sweeter every chapter :D

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-Katie

it was nice finding out a bit more about the heroine. the chapter seemed a bit short, but that's forgivable. i think your ville is quite believable. lovely update

I agree, Villes' character is really sweet, and suits the story well. :)
He's really careful with her, even though she doesn't need it particularly, but he's obviously making this trip waay better for her. I'm interested to find out a wee bit more about her opinion on her Father, as I'm not quite sure as to whether he's nice, but a bit overprotective, or a bastard who she resents. Not that there's any fault in the story tale, it's probably going to come out soon, or I'm being fucking slow again. :P

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-Katie

your voice is great in this. it really eases the flow from one character's perspective to another's. i like i'm behind on my commenting, but overall i think the developments are great. there's a spot or two where a sentence could be smoother, but it's nothing major and the meaning is still understood. i think you've got a good handle on ville's character :)

Whoo! Fuck you, Dave ;]
Perfect as always, but if I continue to write this comment it's just going to become mind-numbingly boring because I JUST CAN'T FAULT IT.

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-Katie

just found the story and i really like it, cant wait to read more

I really like this.... more

Amazing writing! Amazing story. You're super-talented and I already adore this!

The way that she stalled for time before having to tell them that she was in fact 'his' daughter was really comendable, and as you put, she hasn't got in because she's daddy's little girl, or because she shagged people to get where she she is. In every chapter, I find myself liking and respecting her more and more, she really isn't a Mary Sue in any way.She's good a her job, and just wants to be an equal with her workmates. >.<

I loved the fact that he's so smitten already, and yet she's planning on telling him to back off, seen as in most stories the girl flings herself at him and they 'fall in love' really stupidly early on, and spend all their time together, completely dismissing all friends or relatives. Anyhoo, aside from my random ranting, it was really good, as ever. I personally didn't see anything 'a little off' in the second part, but I'm not exactly a literary genius. <3

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-Katie

lovely update :) i liked how you broke this chapter down into the two different parts; it worked and flowed from the first scene to the next quite well. i do think the phrasing was a little off in the second half. still a great update though :)

Yay! Third chapter out already. That's really impressive and shows that you care about your readers loads. >///<
I could never do that, I get fucking awful writers block. Even though the third chapter was a little bit filler-ish, you still made it interesting, and made the reader [at least in my case ;)] associate with the character. Also, kudos for making me larf with the whole 'golden dildo' thing. :D Thanks for bringing us an amazing, original and well written story :3

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-Katie

subscribed. i like :)