The Girl Who Couldn't Feel - Comments

I really like the way this started off. It was intense and made my heart race like mad. However, you have quite a few grammar, punctuation and spelling errors here and there. For example, here, “because I was bad.” I whispered. “go now.” I whispered. you used whispered twice. You can either combine the sentence so it'll be "Because I was bad. Go now," I whispered. or just delete the other whispered all together. Anyways, you have a great story here; it just needs a bit of polishing. I suggest getting a beta for this. They'll help you make your story the best it can be. It has really, really great potential; like I said, it just needs a bit of polishing.
Good luck with this!

I love your story by the way and please update
update they way you want the story to lead, type what you want tp type but make it makes sence

SOSOSOSO good!!
Update soon!
thanks(:

omg i LOOOOVVEE this! its really good! cant wait 4 an update!

Thank You so much! Your comment means a lot to me! =) I will definitely try to update weekly or more!

how the hell does this story has little comments. I love the being of this story because you show the relationship Marie has towards other people very well. Some writers try to do a character like Marie always forget it is not easy to be good friends with some one with your situation. I like how you still have her disconnected from every body and how it impacts herself. i hope this comment way clear for you to understand. Please update at least every week or more i would love to know where this story will go or lead.

really good chapter :)

Thanks so much! I will definitely write more soon! =)

that is the best storie on mibba that i've ever read write more soon please