I really do love how you describe the scene. I feel like I can really see everything in my head as if centaurs are a thing I see in the day to day. I do find that you often use ellipses incorrectly, I only bring it up because I often make the same mistake in writing. They are used as a break in thought or to show interruption in narrative stories from what I was told. I am no gramma nazi either I make a million mistakes myself! Really though I love what you are doing with the story and really keep up the good work. Never give up on writing, in the wise (and semi-edified) lyrics of Elsa's song in Frozen; let it flow.
February 8th, 2017 at 12:24pm