Skipping a Beat - Comments

OOOOO LAAAAA LAAAAAAAA

Can I just for a moment, gush super hard about this. GUSH GUSH GUSH.

so that he groaned into my mouth and I thought i was going to pass out on the spot.

Oh my goodness! Finally some action! This was good, I kinda squealed, I get to into any story I read... :D

i fell in love with the last chapter. but for some reason i don't like Reese... there's something about him that i just don't like

I just lurrrrrv this story <3

Ahahahah, I like Reese more than ever, the way how he questioned Laura about why she doesn't drink shows that he's a lot more observant than he lets on, I like characters like that. Those sort of lazy, sleepy characters that a lot of people just brush off, until BAM! They're like, a lot smarter than you thought intially. xD AND OMG, REESE HAS A SEXY VOICE! I love it when boys have sexy voices, it just makes me want to tear their clothes off. xD And, okay. I don't want to sound rude or anything, but I lol'd when Reese's dad ran off with some young girl from China who can't speak any English. The first thing that flashed through my mind was, "Asian mail order bride." Ahahaha, I'm Asian myself, though, just to clear things up. *gives shifty look* AND HOLY SHIT, FINALLY. When I was reading this, all I thought was that they just needed to make out already and get it over and done with, and YOU DID IT. YOU GRANTED MY WISH. AND LAURA BETTER WANT HIM STILL. Or I'll steal Reese myself. Hah. Anyway, update soon please? This is amazing, I loved it like usual ;) <3

FINALLY THEY KISSED!!!! Haha I LOVED it and I can't wait for more! (:

I like it.
And about the ending, I want a happy one. I mean, they don't have to get married and shit but... A happy ending none the less.

i really do like this.
update soon please :)

Oh, I really like this. The concept is...original and unique, and most of of all, both engaging and fresh.
As well, it's quite entertaining :) I love the narrative tone you employ, because not only does it pull me in and introduce me to the character, it also really tugs the story forward, which I love.

My only con/crit is that you have a number of small errors scattered throughout; nothing major, but they do a little cosmetic damage to your otherwise great story. I would suggest getting a beta or someone to read it through for you.

Overall though, awesome job!

I'm commenting as a response to your comment swap on your journal. I just read the first chapter since mine is just one as well and I have to say...
OH MY FUCKING GOD!! (I am so reading the rest of this!!)
Your first chapter is so awesome, it flows along wonderfully and the whole:
"More than anything, this is a story about holding on. About knowing when you’re supposed to let go and what happens when you don’t. It’s about the brilliant destruction that a stranger can make out of your life. The wonderful mysteries that hide behind every corner of this world, the beauty and the misery and the explosion that comes when you press your lips against someone’s and it just feels right."
Is just plain beautiful :D I am so going to subscribe to this and read on to the next chapters as soon as I'm done with my updates, I'm just curious to see what the whole deal with Reese is :B wonderful! Good job and keep it up!

btw, my story is Valen

I love it, I love Reese and Laura so much.

Lovelyy! Update soon! (:

I wanna see more Reese!

I love Reese, his cocky attitude makes me laugh and I just love how Laura always pretends to be mad with him when she secretly likes his attention, they totally need to just make out already! I love Jamie too, he's a bit of a creeper but I like him, he's awesome ;P while I totally want Reese and Laura to get a happy ending, maybe a bittersweet end to the story would be better, as it suits the nostalgic tone you have going on :D but this was awesome,update soon <3

It's getting so much more interesting.

I adore your wit, I wish I could think of things like those silly phrases you create in your story. Keep up the great work

I think its going amazing so far. I loved the little website characters page, very nice. I made an account and played around with wiz.com a lot. There's moments when I hate Reese then there's not. Claire is just plain awesome. I kinda wish I had a friend like her. :)
Anyways can’t wait till the next update! :D

<3 I KNOW A SECRET ABOUT THIS NOW ;] hehehehehe I feel so priveledged.

So yeah, I just read two updates for the price of one and they were both beautiful. I didn't even hate Paige which is weird because she's the hoe who stole Reese from Laura and since Laura is the best character/name in the world I should hate her by default. I can't, though, because you're the super talented writer that you are and you make her real, so she's not just that bitch. I disliked Reese in the chapters though, but really I loved him deep down, man he was such a jerk to her though. And Claire = LOVE! She's like Laura's Mum because her realy Mum's a deadbeat. And a prostitute...

ANYWAY this story is amazing and deserves to be on the Project Fiction. Actually screw that that the list should be the SKIPPING A BEAT LIST because it's so awesomeeeeee! Yes, my feelings are the strong ;] xox

Such*

Fuck Paige up, Laura! Fuck Reese for being suck a douchebag! Fuck this story for being so engrossingly good!
:-)
That is all, xo.

First of all, I love the layout. It's plain and simple, but the colours, font, banner and background just tie in well perfectly, and it kind of has a bohemian sort of vibe to it, which is adorable. :) I'm not a fan of sort summaries, but you pull it off, it makes the reader super intrigued and the reader feels kind of sad as well, because the boy sounds like a player, and you get the feeling that Laura is setting herself up to get her heart broken . :D

I really loved the first chapter/prologue, it's a good start to the story and again, like the summary, it makes the reader wonder what's going to happen next. I LOVE YOUR DESCRIPTION OF LUNA'S. Seriously, it was amazing and I could imagine it so vividly. I imagine it to be a coffee shop in the heart of NYC, with hipsters drinking from cups and reading this big gigantic enormous textbook out of their horn-rimmed glasses, though you mentioned it was a place for businessmen and their snooty socialite wives. xD I like the fact that you make Laura address the readers, it makes her so much more relatable. Oh my god, I love Reese. Really I do, I sympathise with Laura for falling for him, you get the feeling she knows she's not meant do, but she goes ahead and likes him anyway. Reese is so mysterious and it just makes the reader want to know more and more about him. x] This is such a great story, and congratulations on Project Fiction. :) Keep up the good work, I'm subbing <3

Dear God, there are no words that can ever be uttered, written, thought of, or created that can describe how brilliant this story is. Brilliant doesn't even come close to being a strong enough word to describe this. Not even close. I've never read something so interesting, captivating, descriptive, and beautiful. Not only did you present Laura perfectly, you've presented New York City, the United States, the world as a whole perfectly. Just the way you described Luna's and the people in the chapter coffee shop girl was astounding. It fit perfectly and I'm now convinced that you know everything about everything. Don't try to tell me different because you obviously do, yo. I've grown very attached to Laura already, she's a very realistic, relatable, and interesting character. And Reese is so. . tantalizing to me. Everything about him makes me want to know absolutely everything that makes him tick. I love this story and it's easy to see why this story is on Project Fiction. Again, congratulations and I'll be expecting an update soon! <3