Blood Pleasure - Comments

Come on, how much do I have to wait till your next update? And yeah, I agree with the comment below. Post soon. Xd

Post soon. Xd

Seriously this is very well written and I just love the characters you created. High five for the kick-ass layout. <3

I like this! I would say the background since it is moving makes it hard to read and light on dark text is more challenging to read, but I think thats just me. This isnt the kind of stuff I usually read but I enjoy this. I like your design of the page as a whole though. Your grammar is pretty good and I enjoyed most of this. Good job C:

I can't wait to find out what happens next. XD

I can't wait to find out what happens next. XD

I really like how you edited this. It's even better than how it was. Well done! XD

The 24h chapetr was short but you made your point. I really wanna know more about Lestat though and the past Lestat has with Marian. :)

I'm so glad Marian met a new friend because honestly I don't really like that bich Mayra. So what if Raven fell in love with Marian? He wasn't hers to begin with.

Post more sooner, please. ;)

[Comment swap] Honestly, this isn't my taste in stories, but I think this has some potential to it. The descriptions could be a lot more vivid; I felt like I had to paint the entire picture myself, and I don't really know how you imagined it. It has quite the plot going on, with intense action moments.

I had to go to default as well with the layout, because it hurt my eyes and I'm not very fond of the color scheme or the banner. You have pretty steady grammar, with a few mistakes here and there--but definitely nothing major, which is important. You could work on your sentence structures a bit, but otherwise, this isn't hard to read at all.
Your characters are interesting and unique, and I like the way everything fits together like a puzzle, in a way. It makes a bit more sense to everything else that's happening. The relationships are realistic regarding the plot, which is also extremely important.

Detail is definitely something to work on--probably the biggest problem. But with lots of hard work, I think that this could be a pretty good story for people who like this genre. Personally, I'm not a big fan, but definitely the best of wishes! :)

Looks like a good story so far. To be honest, I found the layout a little distracting so I had to go to default, but I thought it was cool and the banner was awesome.

As for the story, you've done very well at writing the dramatic action, the most important part of the story. Your quotes looked good and the actions your characters took fit. The one problem I noticed is that there wasn't a whole lot of detail to the setting. I really didn't have a very good feel for where these characters were speaking. When you get around to editing this a little bit, please try to add that in as much as possible.

Thanks and good luck with all your writing ^_^

Can't wait for the next one.

Fuck! Don't you dare give up on this. UPDATE!!!

I love your layout to bits. It's totally kick-ass, if you get me <3 Plot: 100% interesting Characters: 100% the best ever Writing skills: 1000% What else do I have to say to make you post NOW??? I DEMAND NEW CHAPTERS. :DDD

Nyah. Layout no go. It hurts man.
Anyway. I read the first few chapters and the story just didn't sit well with me. If I were to be completely honest, it seemed to lack description and a few of the sentences just made... No sense.
Other than that, I like the plot. It would draw most people in. In fact, if you worked on the descriptions I'm more than certain this would be such an amazing book.
A few typos and a few awkward sentences, other than that it's a solid story.

Its obvious that I didn't have much time to read all the chapters. I just read the first five chapters and so far its such a great story.
Well I haven't read a story about vampires before but I do like your characters here.
Keep update, I'll read another chapters tho :D

This is a good story, but the background hurts my eyes and I'll be reading and get distracted and start staring at the side.

Kudos on making this 'dark'. When most people write about vampires and the mafia and kidnapping it's always rather lighthearted and you didn't do that.

Comment swap sent me here;
I was very impressed by this story. Which is saying a lot, because I'm not into vampires, at all. I just think it's overused, but I'm glad I came across this story. I didn't read all of it, but I read the first few chapters and I liked it. But, the layout was distracting, and it kind of hurt my eyes as I tried to read. Other than that, you did a good job. Keep up the good work. :)

comment swap;
Alright like a majority said, the layout was a bit distracting as were the huge [yet sexy] lips at the top. I ended up switched over to a default layout half way through the first chapter just because the movement in the background kept catching my eye over the words of the story. While it is creative its distracting.

First, is this a fanfic of some sort? Just because the name Lestat is used I can't help but think of Anne Rice's Lestat

Second, I had a concern on the second chapter, where Raven first speaks he says, Maira is that a nickname? Or maybe an auto correct by a tricky spell check? Its used several times so I'm just wondering. Also "Maira haslong black hair that reach her waist." a space is missing before has and long and there is a weird break in the third paragraph. In chapter three "Marian was his now own, as the drunken Raven wanted." Its worded awkwardly, maybe it should be "Marian was his now, as the drunken Raven wanted." or possible "Marian was his own now, as the drunken Raven wanted."

I only read to chapter three but I'll continue this story in the next few days.

I'm new at this comment swap thing soo...yeah. I disagree with the other users about your lay out. It's creative and i didn't even know you could use a moving picture. I like the plot of this story and how Raven is so demanding but doesn't know how to get what he wants without hurting someone or being EXTREMELY selfish and hurtful. I'm not a grammar NAZI, so nothing bugged me. Not like some stories on Mibba where there is absolutely no spacing or quotations for dialogue, that crap bugs the shit out of me.